television has destroyed communication among friends and family. agree or disagree?

Has television destroyed the communication? Different people express various opinions on this. Personally, I agree that the television has destroyed the communication. Why? This is because people spend most of the time on television, they do not gather and discuss, and become self-centered.

First, people overly watch the television. They do not provide the free time for their friends and family. For instance, I used to spend all the evening by watching a television program even our family had the important meetings. My family did not have the time to meet other than the evening. That’s destroyed the communication between me and my family. However, my brother never watched the television and he made good communication with all family members. In addition, he had lots of friends who daily communicated. On the opposite, I had only two friends which became contactless because I watched the television in free time. Thus, watching television destroy the communication.

Next, discussion and gathering of the people are weakened by watching the television. People do not discuss too much about an issue by watching the television. For example, in my social culture in early time, people with their friends must be gathered in a house. Although they are busy, they discussed the social problems and sang our folk songs. However, when the electricity, as well as television facilities, came into our society, we watched the television even we were free. Moreover, now, we do not gather easily when the serious problem occurred. We have to worry about the loss of a television program. As a result, the communication among the kith and kin has destroyed. Thus, watching television destroy the communication between the friends as well as family.

Further, we become self-centered. The self-centered person cannot communicate the information to the family and friends. Let us illustrate from my nature. I used to watch the television. The Television program shows the discrepancy between the educated and uneducated people. I support the program and I think I am superior. Because I am educated and try to control all family members. However, others members disagree and our communication do not become so good. In addition, we anger to each-others. Thus, watching the television is bad for communication.

In summation, television has destroyed the communication among friends and family. This is because people spend most of the time on television, they do not gather and discuss, and become self-centered.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31421446384 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12056676793 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443890274314 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.24807539 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.6764705882 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.7941176471 20.6045352989 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332956003945 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103537628436 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155706833615 0.0737576698707 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216089510382 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664608207962 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.85 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.63 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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