TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

If the university is juggling which sectors should provide it with more funds libraries or social activities. The University should spend less money in libraries and keep spending more money in sports and activities. While it is true that libraries have contributed to the students as social institutions where students help each other, serving the students who enjoy reading or want to experience classes for free. One can not deny that is obviously valuable to spend more money on sports and activities when it comes to keeping them healthy, learning many valuable things, gaining more skills.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that sports are helping the students to keep healthy. Nowadays, there are a lot of excuses for not doing exercises because of space, time, and health problems. No matter what circumstances the people have they should keep healthy by taking few mints to do exercises. The students spend most of their time at school doing assignments, making researchers, and attending classes. They need some time to relax and relieve their stress. So offering sports team at school will provide them the chance to do some exercises to relieve their stress. Some times being stressful causes a lot of diseases such as high blood pressure, heart attack and so on. Therefore sports are the best preventative medicine from any diseases. If the students are healthier, the life will go on fighting with the other problems they will face in their life, if not; their life will go on fighting with the health problems.

Another reason that deserves more words is that sports teams are the easiest way to access the real society where they can deal with different students having different cultures’, interests’ languages’. As the result, they can learn many valuable skills such as how to deal with the variety of people, try to please everyone that help them to develop good communication skills, all of that will benefit them in the real adult life to make new friends easily. On top of that, they can learn many valuable experiences such as how to be co-operative as many skills should be divided among individual, no one can win the game alone, no matter how fast he is, how strong he is, everyone should co-operate to win the game, which is valuable experience in their future career. For example, I remember when I was in pharmacy school, I participated in soccer ball team, I remember all my teammates were not selfish everyone cooperates with each other to win the game, the aims’ of everyone is the same main goal of the team. I learned how to help other, and the importance of cooperation. When I grew up and worked as a pharmacist in bigger company Pfizer. I co-operated with my coworker to finish the work in a timely manner that helped to make a productive work.

Admittedly, some people hold the opposite side which is the university should spend more money in the libraries and classes since the libraries provide many benefits to students in which they can find the books they need to get the knowledge. Therefore, they should update the library with the most recent books to help the students get the most updated information. In addition, some students were not able to buy the books they need since it is very expensive, however, the library provides them the chance to get books for free, and provide them a chance to use the computers to access the internet for free. So without the top-notch library, there will not be any academic progress at the school.
As all things considered, even if the libraries provide many benefits, people can live in a lack of libraries; thereafter, they try to find an alternative to the library such as e-books. However, when it comes to the benefits of sports and activities are more valuable than the libraries since the acquaintance of skills and experiences and keeping us healthy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, such as, it is true, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3229.0 1977.66487455 163% => OK
No of words: 660.0 407.700716846 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89242424242 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06857624559 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67877545246 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434848484848 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 993.6 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.7266535338 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.192307692 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130615294337 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436004314944 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355437166152 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854186015336 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299252602537 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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