TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

In the country like India, people have a strong inclination towards the education over other streams like sports or social activities. But my perception doesn’t fit this idea of the box. I would strongly agree with the statements that sports and social activities should be treated as important as the education. And colleges and the university would need to financially fund equally among all these 3 streams. The reasons behind my stance are as follows:

Firstly, I could connect this scenario to the analogy that five senses of our body. As all the senses are equally important for the body, similarly education that is a process of attaining the knowledge, the sports -the physical activity and the social activity that is social interaction together make a person complete. If a person attains the knowledge through education but doesn’t invest any time in physical activity then the person would gradually become unfit, if we are sick, then we can’t concentrate on any other things. So all the 3 things make healthy life for the human.

Secondly, all the humans aren’t meant to become Einstein or Stephen Hawking. Many have potential became a next Rodger Federer or Sachin Tendulkar. So the college provides a podium, where people can identify their interest and passion. So it is very important that college provide equal resources for the sports too along with the libraries. So that student could excel in that field of interest with help of the resources.
Thirdly, irrespective of being brainy or sporty. The person should be able to socialize and well communicative. So if a person could able to breakthrough a theory, it is very important to express his ideas and the convince the people around. So the ultimate contentment he would receive only by gaining appreciation from the people. So as the college is the place which should inculcate all these skills in the people, so college to cater some time and funds to social activities too. So that students would open up and try to be more expressive.
In conclusion, the student’s time at college is very important in student’s life, if at this time if the students are nurtured in a right way then it would eventually make a proper pathway in their future. So colleges and universities should give equal attention in sports, social activities and education.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...he sports too along with the libraries. So that student could excel in that field of in...
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...very important to express his ideas and the convince the people around. So the ultimate cont...
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...y gaining appreciation from the people. So as the college is the place which shoul...
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...ime and funds to social activities too. So that students would open up and try to ...
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... this time if the students are nurtured in a right way then it would eventually make a proper ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05641025641 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81927245454 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510256410256 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.210766977 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9047619048 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161480649399 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532073413509 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683191395478 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996740096436 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042878867551 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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