It is indisputable that the old friends have a great significant pivotal role in their friend’s life not only in helping each other in getting information but also help them to acquire valuable life lessons. The issue whether friends should keep old friends or not aroused much controversy between people with different age, and different perspectives. Some contend think that they should replace old friends by new friends to acquire more valuable experiences. In my opinion, however, I agree that they should keep the old friends since old friends are in same age, and have the same interests, and they are more influential than the new friends.
To begin with, the old friends are at the same age, having the same interest, having a lot in common. They spend most of the time together even after they return home, Calling each other, or hanging out at the park together; they are taking in many subjects such as schools subjects, their daily life, their interest, and their hobbies. As the consequence, they usually imitate each other unconsciously, As the result, it develops a strength relationship can not be broken forever, They can enjoy together all time, and have fun while the new friends, they do not know each other, might have not the same interests, thus they can not get along well. For instance, my little brother and his friend are friends from a long time, both interested in soccer games and they spent almost of their spare time talking about the soccer games worldwide and great football player. My brother’s friend is a good soccer player and my brother tends to imitate his behavior, enjoy all the time together, and encourage each other to go forward.
In addition to same interests between the old friends, an everlasting friend may have greater influence in the long run than new friends. Some of our friends at school may become friends forever. This kind of friends will influence us even when we graduate. However, new friends, on the contrary seldom become everlasting during our lives since they know each other from short periods of time. Therefore, they will not have great influence in the long run as old friends do. Everlasting students understand each other more since they have a lot in common. Friendship is considered as motivation tools between each other to foster each other to get success within a short time. For example, I had a friend from primary schools, he is one of my best friends, he is so smart, helping me a lot whenever I need, and he used to encourage me to work hard in my work to get a high promotion. There is proverb saying” Friendship, like phosphorus, shines brightest when all around is dark” reflecting us that the old friends have a great impact on the students’ life.
As all things considered, while the new friends play an important role in our life such as exchange new ideas, and life lessons. When it comes to the influence of the old friends are far outweigh than the new friends’ influence due to they are at the same ages, having the same hobbies, and the t everlasting friends can encourage each other to go forward.
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When it comes to the influence of the old friends are far outweigh than the new friends’ influence due to they are at the same ages
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No. of Words: 537 while No. of Different Words: 226 //it means it is wordy
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 537 350
No. of Characters: 2489 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.814 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.635 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.393 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.838 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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It is indisputable that the old friends ...
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...e influential than the new friends. To begin with, the old friends are at th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...nd encourage each other to go forward. In addition to same interests between th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...t impact on the students' life. As all things considered, while the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... encourage each other to go forward.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'kind of', 'such as', 'talking about', 'in my opinion', 'on the contrary', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.203883495146 0.229887763892 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.139158576052 0.158761421928 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.122977346278 0.0866891130778 142% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0598705501618 0.046263068375 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0744336569579 0.0685040099705 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.101941747573 0.118717715034 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0323624595469 0.0351676179071 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63199187636 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0226537216828 0.0309702414327 73% => OK
Particles: 0.00161812297735 0.00188951952338 86% => OK
Determiners: 0.0954692556634 0.0887237588012 108% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0194174757282 0.0209618222197 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00647249190939 0.0139019557991 47% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3161.0 2387.08602151 132% => OK
No of words: 537.0 408.028673835 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88640595903 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31843575419 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253258845438 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.163873370577 0.174417080927 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102420856611 0.112833075102 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63199187636 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441340782123 0.524397521467 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.3879465736 59.2087087015 87% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.85 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.339486733 48.84282405 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.05 120.699889404 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.85 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.95 0.644075263715 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 52.1758845438 45.7405998639 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.23668639053 1.45489161554 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2969810618 0.300154397459 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.140681016772 0.103427244359 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0932684130227 0.0752933317313 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.501301157967 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140278484046 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123850855252 0.114077575197 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626014242766 0.0781384742642 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.432432636167 0.336927656856 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0260796958048 0.067059652881 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239443322624 0.210909579961 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485211006644 0.0618886996521 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 18.0 8.42114695341 214% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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