by advanced of technology, communication between the people has been increased. therefore, people are more in relation with others. they based on an intrinsic needs wants to have friend a person who can rely on she/he. who can spend time with. as far as it concerned to me, I believe that people needs to have friends but no one couldn't be like an old friend who we are familiar with and they are familiar with us too. in following are rendered two reason which support my idea.
First and foremost is that old friends after period of time they aren't friend anymore and can be recognized as relative. old friend know about different aspect of us and most of the time they can help us in a hard situation like what our family would do on that time. for instance, I remember when I was child I had friend who was my neighbor. after 10 years when I wen to university, we were indeed were friend but closer than that times. I saw a boy and I doubt does hi good to start a relationship or not,as my parents spent most of the time in their works I hadn't anyone whom I can talk to or guide me.at this time Sara my best friend listen to me and like my parents advise me what is good for me during that time she know me completely and understand how characteristic I am so it told me is he good for me or not. problems like this only can be solved by old friends person who knows you wee than yourself either.
Second, in new friendship there is less trust than old one. for example, when got admission for a university, I wen there for gather more information about the university and it's campus. when I arrived I just saw a girl who seems is a upper years and I started to talk with her because I need person who can help me to find my information. after short time speaking she suddenly become very close to me and invited me to drink coffee I wen to the café teria with her and she started talking about her family and how rich they are and some thing which aren't acceptable and I think that her chats were with exaggerate. it might be wasn't lie and were trust but I couldn't trust on her. she considered me as her new friend but I couldn't trust on her and on that time I wish Sara my close friend were there instead of her. she said something unusual and based on that I can't trust on answers which she gave to the question which I asked her about the university.it shows that how is hard to make a trust in new friendship.
in general, old friends are persons who are lasting for a long time and during this period lots of bad or good event may happened which caused to make this friendship more strong. with lots of familiarities in different accept of each others. I think it's not fair to change such a this reliable friend with new one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in general, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.0286738351 245% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 94.0 43.0788530466 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23047619048 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35528565604 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445714285714 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.5506872915 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.954545455 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8636363636 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77272727273 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 5.5376344086 758% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140145669865 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547410622557 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366006440619 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999699082878 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230898930192 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.55 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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