People are obsessed best when they are pursued in their hobby rather than other things. An author posits that people are involved in their avocation rather than their assessment. however, All people, in my view, are not involved in their personal enjoyment.
At first, the engagement of people highly depends upon the situation. If a person is free, he may be involved in his fascinating activities, but if he has some sort of duty- that duty is important such as exam, assignment etc, he will be able to give up his pursuit and will be involved in his obligation. For example, My school friends used to go tour, swimming, outing, and fishing almost every weekend. However, I, when studying Engineer course, used to stay my home doing assignment, studying even though I like to get involved in such activity. In additional, People in our country migrate to another places, even abroad, for education, jobs, however they want to spend their most of their time in their home town, with families.
Second, what do we say if a duty of a person is his hobby. For instance, I have a cousin who was deeply absorbed in computer software. He has a vast knowledge of software in an early age and when he passed high school, he studied computer programming. Now, he is enjoying his job as person enjoying holiday. Similarly, like him, many person make their first line of duty their hobby.
In third, Not all but almost people who are free used to be pursued in activity may participate in imposition benefit for society. A person may be involved in clubs, certain activity not due to his hobby but feeling his sense of duty in such activity. In case, My grandfather used to get involved in activities such as environment cleaning program, development program, of society.
Due to all following reasons, I believe that not all people gets involved in personal enjoyment- jobs, hobby, sense of duty.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...avocation rather than their assessment. however, All people, in my view, are not involv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, similarly, so, third, for example, for instance, in addition, sort of, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81039755352 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61692590824 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532110091743 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5143613975 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5294117647 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121654282804 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044334901132 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439907076568 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711226023448 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289400138502 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.