With advancement of technology, the people traditional life’s changed to smart bots, and the hobbies of children from playing in the middle of gardens changed to playing on IPad. So the children adapted themselves to new situations but their parents couldn’t tolerate it, and they always get angry when their children spend lots of time on their cellphones. Sometimes they think about not to allow their child to play on computer games but it’s not fair, it’s a selfish decision. In my opinion, parents should take care of their children about their health and their educations but they shouldn’t have forbidden anything for them, because all children deserve the best things.
First, banning video games is a question?? Banning video games will slow down our evolution. Video games help bring the future to life and helps us with ideas for the future. They entertain our minds and brings out the hidden shy people in socializing and so much more. Video games help reaction time, Decision making, self-esteem. So don't question whether or not to ban video games.
Second, one of my coworkers said, if you're that bothered about Video Games just don’t play them. They're not bad for kids either because games like Minecraft can teach them about types of wood, counting, reading, measuring etc. Most people think kids play violent video games but what they fail to understand is that there is an age rating at the front of the cover art of a game and it's the parents fault if their child is playing it. Also if video games are a 'waste of time', surly board games are as well. I see a lot of people bringing up the fact that video games make people violent. The only thing that makes you violent are mental issues, I’ve played many violent video games and I’m far from a violent person. Also, we have a different idea’s, for example, one of my friends said; I'm an addict and they have ruined many years of my life, of course it's impossible to ban them, but non-addicts should be more aware of just how dangerous they can be. I hate myself when I play too much. It's like a drug, like heroine- you can't think of anything else. You non-addicts probably think I'm being silly. Well, just stop, think, and imagine your life in the doldrums. You don't need domestic violence, hunger, homelessness or drug-addiction for it- computer games can ruin your life. And I really think that, Video games encourage teamwork. In team games, we can train our group work skills. We can meet many friends and improve our friendship also. Otherwise, playing video games can be a good way to relieve our stress. In my country, people have so much pressure since they need to go to school or work for a whole day. Playing video game is really a good way to help them relieve pressure. There are so many benefits of playing video games so I think video games shouldn't be banned.
In conclusion, playing games is a normal way to spend our boring time in an interesting way, and it’s not matter how old are you? Everybody can find the best game they’ve liked. And nobody can impose on people to whatever they think is right. I hope that the examples given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, well, as for, for example, i think, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2672.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 561.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76292335116 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45910628354 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502673796791 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.2410703334 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9696969697 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206911869176 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615280652333 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445818758876 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121390495004 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446293359627 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.