I, personaly, strongly agree that the extended family is becoming uncommon. After the industrial revolution, human beings' lifestyle have changed significantly and altered many aspects of life as well families structures. Moreover, nowadays, people have a different attitude, interests, desires and so forth which diable to have a close tie with their relatives. And the last but not least, relationship in general have declined among folks, so it definetely effects relations in familys too.
First, after the so-called industrial revolution people migrated from rural areas to urban zones. They used to live on by working in fields, and also they were a small comunities with limited amount of inhabitant. They faced with abundant difficulties, and they could not conqure hardships unless they supported each other. Thus, we get to the point that how much extended family was vital for ancient people to survive. But, by migration to cities, people became more independent and they we did not obligate to keep close relationship with others as well as their family. That is why I think the humans progress during the history have changed shape of families.
Second of all, today, people have a variety of options to make their future. For example, a group of people may want to be a professional athlete, whereas others are interested in participating in university and get a degree. Besides, we tend to make relation with people who have the same concerns. Hence, one searchs for a person with a specific quality. It is obvious that having more in common with a firend gets a higher priority than try to merely communicate with your relatives, particularly when they do not underestand you!
Ultimately, I assume that people appreciate solitude in comparison to the past. For example, I prefer to stay at home and study my favorite books rather than interact with my cousines. It does not mean that I am selfish. However, I realize that many of my friends have the same feeling as mine.
For all the reasons that I have stated, I presume, not only has extended family decayed, but also people even have no desire to start friendship to one another! our society has been changing rapidly and people comprehend life differently. Therefore, the old kinds of relationship certainly have no more practical results and should be subtituded with new forms.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
... After the industrial revolution, human beings lifestyle have changed significantly an...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tely effects relations in familys too. First, after the so-called industrial re...
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Line 9, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Our
...ire to start friendship to one another! our society has been changing rapidly and p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, as to, for example, i think, in general, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0822622108 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75732077401 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601542416452 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9762910916 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.85 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115976277617 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0360992776203 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372367425707 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648405377067 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167121669101 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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