TPO 14 independent writing- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Due to traveling to foreign countries gradually becomes easier and cheaper, it comes into people’s mind firstly when we are planning for our holiday. Data shows that less people choose to traveling in their own country. Nevertheless, in my opinion, traveling in our own country has bunch of benefits. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.
First of all, we will love our country more through traveling in it. Since 2020, pandemic has severely taken all over the world. Even though Taiwan is relatively safe, the government not allow Taiwanese people to travel oversees. As a result, my friends and I have planned to discover different part of Taiwan during holiday. We went to Kinmen, which is a small island of Taiwan I have never been to. There are full of historical sites which are astonishing, and I was really enjoying to explore the story about the past of Taiwan. My friends and I cherish those ancient buildings that belong to our culture and we become more proud of our country after the trip.
Apart from that, traveling in our own country can boost the economy for ourselves. Most of the Taiwanese people are living and working in the urban area, and our money our mostly spend around the area. However, comparing to other rural parts of Taiwan, the youngsters are moving out, less people are spending their money there. For example, my friend’s grandpa was holding a restaurant in Taitung which is basically selling to tourists. Unfortunately, due to not lots of people went there, the restaurant was forcing to close. In addition to the restaurants, lots of other industries in the rural are facing the same situation. If we can transfer our travel destination to those places, those industries can obtain more possibilities to survive.
Admittedly, it is undeniable that it is more exited to traveling abroad because we can see different people and customs of other countries. Nevertheless, to travel in our own country can not only benefits our own selves. We can not only assist other Taiwanese people’s living, but also through sharing the love of our country, we can let more foreigners love Taiwan, too.
In a nutshell, I maintain the perception that people benefit more from traveling in their own country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...anning for our holiday. Data shows that less people choose to traveling in their own...
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Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'bunched'.
Suggestion: bunched
...inion, traveling in our own country has bunch of benefits. In the ensuing essay, my p...
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Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoying exploring'.
Suggestion: enjoying exploring
...which are astonishing, and I was really enjoying to explore the story about the past of Taiwan. My ...
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Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... Taiwan, the youngsters are moving out, less people are spending their money there. ...
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Line 5, column 518, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'closing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: closing
... went there, the restaurant was forcing to close. In addition to the restaurants, lots o...
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Line 7, column 197, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
... travel in our own country can not only benefits our own selves. We can not only assist ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, apart from, as for, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99476439791 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71082367675 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51832460733 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8659051495 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.7272727273 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3636363636 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253465410836 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885588310679 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934606553931 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195089895547 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849106001371 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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