TPO 14 task 2
In this ameliorate and intricate world, in all progressive societies, traveling and visiting is one of the most pivotal requirements for human beings which should be fulfilled to improve life. This will be satisfied during travel different places inside or outside one's country. While many people hold the idea that it is beneficial trip to a foreign country to spend time, others believe that traveling inside one's country benefits him or her. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter prospect and prefer to travel in my own country. I feel this way as my reasons elaborated upon hereunder to corroborate my point of view.
What tops the chart, people by traveling through their own country can save money, which can be dedicated to spend on other needs of the travel. As far as anyone knows, traveling other countries require a large amount of money for ticket and side expenses. However, one by visiting and travelling through his or her country can easily afford the expenses and spend his or her money on the interests. To be more specified, an example can clearly demonstrate this idea. Last summery, my family decided to go on a two week trip to one of the beautiful countries in the east of Asia. We were five people, when we tried to take tickets, we shocked surprisingly. The prices were so unaffordable which we canceled the trip and we reached the agreement that went on a two week inside trip to see the beautiful places in some central and southern provinces of our own country, Iran. Going on a trip with personal car saves many of costs you should pay the local for transporting. For example we easily could visit any places we wanted with no excess cost and also we were enjoyably free to go wherever we wanted. So, traveling inside the country brings us some lucrative advantages.
Equally important, people by spending their money inside their own country can help the economy thrive which brings them more and more advantages. Going on a trip inside country, helps local people to sell their handicrafts and local products, which government can put some taxes on the products and spend the revenues to supply more facilities which it helps people to have more fun and memorable trip. For example, my aunt lives in a beautiful village which every year attracts many people from inside and outside the country to visit there. There a numerous handicrafts and local cloths which they sell. The authorities enacted rules which helped the locale to benefits more from their selling. As a result of those taxes, some new parking lots were prepared and makes it easier to enjoy their trip.
In conclusion, by taking into account all aforementioned reasons and examples, I strongly believe that people by traveling through their own home-country can gain some benefits. This is because travelling inside the country, not only needs a low budget and affordable for most people but also helps the local people to get some benefits and the government will be benefited, as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...gs us some lucrative advantages. Equally important, people by spending their mon...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2603.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0250965251 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74385112777 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509652509653 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5498283936 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.173913043 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5217391304 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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