tpo 15 task 2

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tpo 15 task 2

Today’s harsh condition of life makes it necessary to organize the expenses and manage ‎income and costs in a logical manner which this idea will be fulfilled during a comprehensive ‎learning from the early years of life. While some people hold the opinion that children is are ‎better to learn mange their own budget to be an undependable individual, other people disagree. ‎I, personally, believe that kids should get sufficient education to learn how handle their money ‎and afford the life's expenses in an economical way. To support my point of view, two ‎significant reasons are being explored in the ‎following paragraphs.‎

To begin with, learning how to spend and save money from the beginning years of life, children ‎will be able to conquer their future difficulties. Financial abilities are one of the most essential ‎requirements for adults to come up with the expensive life in nowadays cities life which it can ‎be satisfied by learning how manage money from the childhood. The case in point is that when ‎I was at elementary school, my kind teacher had an ingenious thought which taught us a key ‎strategy to save money. His creative idea was that whenever we got budget, we should save ‎twenty percent of it and we must spend the other eighty percent which this notion helped us to ‎have some invested money which we could spent spend on our necessities. Therefore, ‎correspondingly to my earlier education, I always save a portion of my income which it ‎convince me to spend wisely and avoid buying unimportant objects or services. That's how a ‎financial learning from the early years of life can influence adult's life.‎

Equally important, children by learning how to regulate their money, they learn disciplines and ‎rules of investing. At the beginning stages of life, children have a curious mind that is largely ‎receptive. So, learning one skill aids them to develop their mental abilities which leads to ‎reinforcement of mind. In the other words, subjecting kids' mind to some new rules and ‎limitations, makes them more creative in a way which they searched for new solutions and find ‎the best one. For instance, I have a nine years old little brother who his teacher taught him to ‎save his money sometimes and spend it intelligently. He always asks questions himself about ‎the money, what he can buy, and how he can save a part of it. Consequently, he does same for ‎any problems encountered in his life, math homework for example. When he wants to solve ‎complicated problems he talks with himself and asks some questions to clarify the question and ‎possible answers. If he didn’t aware of saving money methods, he would not be as creative as ‎now he is.‎

In conclusion, taking account all the aforementioned reasons and examples, learning how to ‎manipulate the earned money is a crucial issue for children from the earlier steps of life. This is ‎because saving money not only helps to always have some saved money which can be ‎accessible in urgent, but also it leads to make kids more involved in their life and active their ‎mind to performe intelligently. ‎

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a logical manner" with adverb for "logical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e expenses and manage ‎income and costs in a logical manner which this idea will be fulfilled durin...
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Line 1, column 510, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an economical way" with adverb for "economical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ir money ‎and afford the lifes expenses in an economical way. To support my point of view, two ‎sign...
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Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ults to come up with the expensive life in nowadays cities life which it can ‎be satisfied ...
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Line 5, column 709, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...have some invested money which we could spent spend on our necessities. Therefore, ‎c...
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Line 5, column 919, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...buying unimportant objects or services. Thats how a ‎financial learning from the earl...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...f life can influence adults life.‎ Equally important, children by learning how to ...
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Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...by learning how to regulate their money, they learn disciplines and ‎rules of inv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2669.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09351145038 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96389405971 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524809160305 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.4116605354 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.277777778 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1111111111 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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