tpo 15 task 2
Today’s harsh condition of life makes it necessary to organize the expenses and manage income and costs in a logical manner which this idea will be fulfilled during a comprehensive learning from the early years of life. While some people hold the opinion that children is are better to learn mange their own budget to be an undependable individual, other people disagree. I, personally, believe that kids should get sufficient education to learn how handle their money and afford the life's expenses in an economical way. To support my point of view, two significant reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, learning how to spend and save money from the beginning years of life, children will be able to conquer their future difficulties. Financial abilities are one of the most essential requirements for adults to come up with the expensive life in nowadays cities life which it can be satisfied by learning how manage money from the childhood. The case in point is that when I was at elementary school, my kind teacher had an ingenious thought which taught us a key strategy to save money. His creative idea was that whenever we got budget, we should save twenty percent of it and we must spend the other eighty percent which this notion helped us to have some invested money which we could spent spend on our necessities. Therefore, correspondingly to my earlier education, I always save a portion of my income which it convince me to spend wisely and avoid buying unimportant objects or services. That's how a financial learning from the early years of life can influence adult's life.
Equally important, children by learning how to regulate their money, they learn disciplines and rules of investing. At the beginning stages of life, children have a curious mind that is largely receptive. So, learning one skill aids them to develop their mental abilities which leads to reinforcement of mind. In the other words, subjecting kids' mind to some new rules and limitations, makes them more creative in a way which they searched for new solutions and find the best one. For instance, I have a nine years old little brother who his teacher taught him to save his money sometimes and spend it intelligently. He always asks questions himself about the money, what he can buy, and how he can save a part of it. Consequently, he does same for any problems encountered in his life, math homework for example. When he wants to solve complicated problems he talks with himself and asks some questions to clarify the question and possible answers. If he didn’t aware of saving money methods, he would not be as creative as now he is.
In conclusion, taking account all the aforementioned reasons and examples, learning how to manipulate the earned money is a crucial issue for children from the earlier steps of life. This is because saving money not only helps to always have some saved money which can be accessible in urgent, but also it leads to make kids more involved in their life and active their mind to performe intelligently.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a logical manner" with adverb for "logical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e expenses and manage income and costs in a logical manner which this idea will be fulfilled durin...
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Line 1, column 510, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an economical way" with adverb for "economical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ir money and afford the lifes expenses in an economical way. To support my point of view, two sign...
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Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ults to come up with the expensive life in nowadays cities life which it can be satisfied ...
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Line 5, column 709, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...have some invested money which we could spent spend on our necessities. Therefore, c...
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Line 5, column 919, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...buying unimportant objects or services. Thats how a financial learning from the earl...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...f life can influence adults life. Equally important, children by learning how to ...
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Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...by learning how to regulate their money, they learn disciplines and rules of inv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2669.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09351145038 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96389405971 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524809160305 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.4116605354 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.277777778 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1111111111 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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