TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As a matter of fact, students have different opinions about spending time. Some of them like to spend their time with their friends and do some interesting things and some of them prefer to spend time with adults such as their parents or their teachers. Both ways have some advantages and disadvantages. Depends on student's interests, they are going to have different characteristics. Researchers did many researches about the young age students and they found same results. Young adults are more influenced by their friends.
First and foremost, they are in the same age, so they can understand each other better. Indeed, they will listen to them better, because they think that their friends can help them. For instance, when a child has some issues with his new phone, his/her parents would suggest him/her to put it somewhere else and try to get a better score in his/her homework instead of help him/her to find a solution. In this case, that kid would avoid of his/her parents. Consequently, all members of this family will be separate emotionally at least for a while.
Additionally, students have always spent time with their friends. Psychologically, children want to be around a person who is fun and interesting. Also, they want to do some exciting things together. Surprisingly, they would be influenced by their same age friends, because of having fun and spending time together.
To sum up, students are spending time and doing some interesting things with their friends, so they are more influenced by them rather than their teachers.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, so, while, at least, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1298.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 257.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05058365759 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7452844067 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536964980545 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3282668577 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.125 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0625 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185757158131 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736598529225 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913507773331 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154863237097 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894610687014 0.0645574589148 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 86.8835125448 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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