There is no doubt that all parents wish their children live a better life and have a bright future. As a result, a number of actions are taken to broaden their children’s horizon and make them well-equipped with a wide range of skills. However, when it comes to me, encouraging children to take a part-time job is one of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life, which embraces enormous advantages.
To begin with, taking a part-time job is the easiest and efficient access to the society. Since children are forced to spend most of their time on studying to get a good grade, they have little chance to touch the society and have no idea about what the real society is like. With a better understanding of our society, children are more likely to get well-prepared for their adult life. In addition, according to a survey on the Internet, children who have taken a part-time job are more capable of accustoming with the changeable society than those who haven’t.
Other than that, taking a part-time job can accumulate experience. Nowadays, a plenty of companies require their potential employees not only have a good command of major knowledge but also related experience. People who have abundant experience are able to adapt to their new jobs faster, work more efficient as well as deal with the relationship with colleagues. Moreover, the companies whose employees are with adequate work experience can save a significant amount of money, resulting from they don’t need to apply new employees with training, which is a big cost of money.
Last but not least, taking a part-time job helps children to build consciousness of independence, which is pretty valuable to their future life. The way to success could never be easy; children will surely suffer plights and lots of problems. The characteristic of independence will be a good support for them to handle those things and get through the adversity by themselves. No one can accompany them during all their life, so they have to learn to deal with all kinds of trouble.
- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- advertising tell people about the country 60
- why people go to college 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 70
- it is more enjoyable to have a job where you working three days every week or five days every week 66
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need a conclusion paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1678 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.74 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.365 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
There is no doubt that all parents wish ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which embraces enormous advantages. To begin with, taking a part-time job is...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...society than those who haven't. Other than that, taking a part-time job ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...raining, which is a big cost of money. Last but not least, taking a part...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'in addition', 'no doubt', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221662468514 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.166246851385 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105793450882 0.0866891130778 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0377833753149 0.046263068375 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0478589420655 0.0685040099705 70% => OK
Prepositions: 0.108312342569 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0277078085642 0.0351676179071 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81749298537 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0478589420655 0.0309702414327 155% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.095717884131 0.0887237588012 108% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0176322418136 0.0209618222197 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0226700251889 0.0139019557991 163% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2115.0 2387.08602151 89% => OK
No of words: 352.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.00852272727 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.326704545455 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184659090909 0.174417080927 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133522727273 0.112833075102 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81749298537 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536931818182 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 58.1696663999 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 25.1428571429 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8187479244 48.84282405 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.071428571 120.699889404 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.644075263715 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 50.1428571429 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.42 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443851092808 0.300154397459 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121313027654 0.103427244359 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0691671184725 0.0752933317313 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.559852170967 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.114994405216 0.151897553556 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.19513414049 0.114077575197 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956313093795 0.0781384742642 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.330619784778 0.336927656856 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0464275632943 0.067059652881 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318584105524 0.210909579961 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880224067636 0.0618886996521 142% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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