TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

Every parent in this world wants their children to become a good human being and to be successful in every field of life. There are many ways that parents usually adopt to help their child to learn things that will facilitate them in facing the real challenges of life and to win in every situation like some of them motivate a child to take part time job as they believe that it is beneficial for their bright future. However, many people do not think alike, in my opinion, it is a very good practice and should be followed by all parents.

To begin with, it is essential for a child to be responsible in handling money for his/her good future. Generally, a child is overprotected by parents, as they provide them all the facilities out of love and affection. In addition, they even give a child pocket money to spend according to his/her wish, this practice most of time makes a child careless and extravagant which is not all in favor of his future. On the contrary, when a child does a part time job, he indeed learns the value of money and thus spends it wisely for example my neighbour’s son is nineteen years old college student. He is working in a cafe part time and is bearing the expenses of his study on his own. Although, my neighbour is very rich but still they motivated their child to do a part time job just to make wiser and sincere.

Also, in today’s modern world children are more prone to get distracted from their main aim towards various unnecessary activities such as chatting on social networking sites, playing games on mobile, watching movies etc. It is impossible for a student to study all day long, they will get exhausted and would require some recreational activity that relieves stress. Doing a part time job of one’s own choice is always a fun and a best way to get a break from study. I am able to recall that recently when I visited America I observed that most of the children are doing part time job in their free time and they used to enjoy it because they made new friends at work place and also they were learning a new skill. Hence, it is justified to say that it is great way to indulge a child into doing something constructive and prevent them from getting spoiled.

To recapitulate, I would like to mention that it not only benefits those students whose parents can’t afford the expense of their education but it also contribute in building a strong foundation of those children as well whose parents are extremely rich and are terrified that their son or daughter might get ruin by getting associated with people who do illegal activities like drugs etc.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...here are many ways that parents usually adopt to help their child to learn things that w...
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Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...e some of them motivate a child to take part time job as they believe that it is benefici...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...e. On the contrary, when a child does a part time job, he indeed learns the value of mone...
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Line 3, column 625, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ollege student. He is working in a cafe part time and is bearing the expenses of his stud...
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Line 3, column 769, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...till they motivated their child to do a part time job just to make wiser and sincere. ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... job just to make wiser and sincere. Also, in today's modern world child...
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Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... activity that relieves stress. Doing a part time job of one's own choice is always ...
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Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...e's own choice is always a fun and a best way to get a break from study. I a...
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Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ved that most of the children are doing part time job in their free time and they used to...
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Line 7, column 158, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'contributes'?
Suggestion: contributes
... expense of their education but it also contribute in building a strong foundation of thos...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'on the contrary', 'to begin with']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229287090559 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.177263969171 0.158761421928 112% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0828516377649 0.0866891130778 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0481695568401 0.046263068375 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0809248554913 0.0685040099705 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107899807322 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0443159922929 0.0351676179071 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54561125753 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0404624277457 0.0309702414327 131% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0770712909441 0.0887237588012 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0134874759152 0.0209618222197 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0173410404624 0.0139019557991 125% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2630.0 2387.08602151 110% => OK
No of words: 471.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5838641189 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.273885350318 0.338922669872 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.218683651805 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148619957537 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0849256900212 0.112833075102 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54561125753 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51804670913 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 60.6243646857 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 31.4 20.5533526081 153% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.192681302 48.84282405 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.333333333 120.699889404 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4 20.5533526081 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 53.2683651805 45.7405998639 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.24528301887 1.45489161554 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358648818253 0.300154397459 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112910497053 0.103427244359 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0558774043277 0.0752933317313 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.561668352823 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155331721993 0.151897553556 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153306619663 0.114077575197 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638482826276 0.0781384742642 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.368940309984 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0790837263167 0.067059652881 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249778104236 0.210909579961 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384831329735 0.0618886996521 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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