TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

No, I disagree with proposed statement. The selection of profession is one of the most important steps in life of every person. I think this step should be passed with the personal decision. The parents only should offer their interests and finally the child can think about them. I have two main reasons in support of my claim.

First, each child has his own talents and can be successful in specific fields. For example a child who can solve the mathematical problems vigorously and has good marks in math during his study process, can be a prominent engineer or scientist instead of a successful medical doctor. So, if his parents are doctors and forced him to pursue their profession, he really fails in the medicine and should leave his study incomplete. Therefore his parents instead of helping, put their child in the harsh conditions and cause him to be an unsuccessful person in society. moreover, their compelling can also leads to worst states when their child tends toward bad things for healing his psychological illness.

Second, parents' pressure can change his child to another person. He can oppose to every things without any reasons just to show his anxious about his parents compelling. He really can opts false things just to free from his parents. For example, he maybe wants to immigrate to another country or to marry with some girl without any recognition about her. Finally these false decisions can be waste all of his life and also all of his parents' life. However, parents exactly want the merits of their children but, such a false and compulsory decisions can lead to suffering their children.

At last, I can conclude that parents forcing about their children profession is a false treatment because each of children have their own abilities and interests so the compulsory profession can hurt their future and also can lead to the opposing behaviors from them against their parents.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95665634675 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5339228638 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6049091848 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1764705882 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137821592773 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540618521985 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043130103361 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997583244177 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210867378577 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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