Nowadays for parents it’s more important to send their children to specials universities, so they pressure to their children to push them harder and harder to study very well, and start high level of the best major as a doctors or engineers to be succeed in future.in my opinion it’s necessary to graduate from university and have an academic degree.
First, 50 years ago when a person had an academic education, they should have luxurious life as sun of kings and lords , and all the people had too much respect for them, but now in this an era of progress , the most of the young people graduated from lots of universities , and it’s normal for all the people, for example in 1992 my grandmother had master of biology and she was a teacher in famous schools , and all the family proud on her and always her father and her brothers show off with her education to all the people.
Second, in the past most of the families , working in their own farm and in some countries the parents shouldn’t allowed their daughter to go out and study same as boys, they thought girls must stay home and take care of her children, but at that time some girls didn’t afraid of their fathers and started to studied at home without any teacher like as my mom 56 years ago she started studied at home and she get a bachelor of medicine at home and she just went out to took an exams of begin the university, I really proud of her, she got progressed without an technology.
In summarize, now parents aware of the technology and they always want the best thing for their children to be succeed than before specially for their girls. I hope to technology help the all students to use it and catch their favorites dreams also, they can study courses online if they have some problems, it will be help them.
- TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U 70
- If you could change one important thing about your country what would you change Use reasons and specific examples to support your answers 73
- TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you 76
- TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 90
- TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a doctor' or simply 'doctors'?
Suggestion: a doctor; doctors
...d start high level of the best major as a doctors or engineers to be succeed in future.in...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...as a doctors or engineers to be succeed in future.in my opinion it's necessary to gr...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...luxurious life as sun of kings and lords , and all the people had too much respect...
^^
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uch respect for them, but now in this an era of progress , the most of the young ...
^^
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hem, but now in this an era of progress , the most of the young people graduated ...
^^
Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ople graduated from lots of universities , and it's normal for all the people...
^^
Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and she was a teacher in famous schools , and all the family proud on her and alw...
^^
Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...Second, in the past most of the families , working in their own farm and in some c...
^^
Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...out and study same as boys, they thought girls must stay home and take care of he...
^^
Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...ago she started studied at home and she get a bachelor of medicine at home and she ...
^^^
Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an exam' or simply 'exams'?
Suggestion: an exam; exams
...e at home and she just went out to took an exams of begin the university, I really proud...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 570, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...roud of her, she got progressed without an technology. In summarize, now parent...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, well, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56441717791 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46436806444 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549079754601 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 65.0 20.1344086022 323% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.965985432 48.9658058833 361% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 297.6 100.406767564 296% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 65.2 20.6045352989 316% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.8 5.45110844103 272% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119823764585 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736259874379 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436755988373 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0789067547525 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322088695157 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.6 11.7677419355 277% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 22.42 58.1214874552 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 10.1575268817 259% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.06 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.002688172 285% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.0 10.0537634409 279% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.