There is no gainsaying that young people are an integral part of society. There are many controversial arguments about the young people impacts on societies. Some people believe that young people have no influence on vital decisions of society especially for future of society. On the other hand, some people hold opposite view. From my perspective, young people have a pivotal role in making decision about the society future. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
First exquisite point to be mentioned is that young people constitute a main part of population in the most of the societies and they can influence the whole society. In better words, young people are great of importance in each society, since they not only so are many but also have time and energy. For example, in my country, there was a rule that women were not allowed to go to football stadiums for years. Last year, a girl was going to go inside stadium and the guards did not permit. She became angry and killed herself as a suicide. After that, the great majority of young people establish many campaign and demonstration and, finally this rule was abolished. Maybe, it seems that this change has no important effect, but it was a revolutionary change for my traditional and religious country.
Second point that comes to my mind is that young people can participate elections and advocate their favorite candidate. There is no doubt that elections have a crucial role in most of the societies. Most of the candidates want to convince young people to vote to them. Everyone knows that young people's votes are important. For example, last year, there was a presidential election and young people were leading proponents of one candidate and the great majority of adults advocate a religious and conservative candidate. Young people attempt hard and finally their favorite candidate won and became president. During one year, he has made important decision for international relationship and human rights. Therefore, young people are capable to influence their societies via elections.
Last but not least, some people believe that the most of the people who are making decision are old people, since they are working in government and parliament and they do not attach importance to young people. In my opinion, young people have far-reaching impact on these people as their children. In better words, young people coerce their parents and families to take care about the young people's concerns. Therefore, young people influence their families, so they are numerous enough to influence the society.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, young people have striking impacts on present and future decision of their societies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun campaign seems to be countable; consider using: 'many campaigns'.
Suggestion: many campaigns
...reat majority of young people establish many campaign and demonstration and, finally this rul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19101123596 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71198437218 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456179775281 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1708986957 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8461538462 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1153846154 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80769230769 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225680675999 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802490730498 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569801462567 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155330614675 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362319679131 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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