TPO 40) paying money to children for their good grades
Throughot history, treating children has been of great importance.The role of children behavior in their future society is undenyable. Due to this crucial impact on their way of future lives, the question of weather children should be paid money for their each high grade is the topic of controversy. While some people agrees withthis idea, other hold the opposite view. I personaly disagree with this plan . In what fallows I will aptly elaborate on my perspective by sogtme reasons.
The first significant point which should be mentioned is that if children earn money for their high grades, They will pay so much attention to making money not to learning lessons. TAake a personal experience as an example, one of my best friend, Mina, was ranked one in the class. In fact all of her marks were 20 becuase her parent would pay her for her excellent marks. In contrast she hadn't leasons which teacher have taght us. She had just memorized evey sentences of books. As a result for upper grade, she couldn't learn as much as other students could. Thus, she failed many of exams.
Another equally important reason is that,human have an endless wantiing character which get satisfied in a more sophisticated way every day which I mean by paying children money, they would want more and more money evey year of their educational yearsFor instance, my brother, Ali, got money for his best mark in mathematics last year.However, when he passed his exam with ful mark yesterday , he wanted two times more money than previous time.
To wrap it up, It can be concluded that offering money to children has many diverse impacts on their characteristics. It is hi
- providing an international fund to protect the world's forests 76
- Edmontosaurus' migration 70
- workers are more satisfied when they have different types of tasks. 70
- educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past, because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, social networking websites. 70
- High school teachers (teachers of age 14-18) spend most of the class time lecturing while the students listen and take note. Other high school teachers spend mmost of the class time on discussion and projects that students are highly involed in and exchan 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, thus, while, for instance, i mean, in contrast, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8829787234 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62326306824 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.659574468085 0.524837075471 126% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 101.029016734 48.9658058833 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 91.8 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309013124599 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777889024915 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945556869875 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181749256542 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245538857399 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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