TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Selecting one of the prescribed ways needs a comprehensive study of the children psychology. The parents have the most significant effect in their children life. However, the selection between the having fun and learning had been one of the most controversial debates in the psychological societies. Some of the psychologists agree with having fun and others refute this aspect. As far as I’m concerned, I think the best use of remaining time is to have fun with their children. Following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my perspective on the proposed topic.

First of all, the children need playing and having fun. These factors help them to grow healthy and have the powerful mind in the future. Since the parents have the most important effect on the children behaviors and training so, they can provide this need well. By the way of example, in my childhood, one of the most favorable moments was that time which I was playing with my mom. We had a pleasant time and during play, we talked about many things. My mom had bought a training book and we were filling its items together. So, I learned more through those games. Indeed, I believe that the parents can have the emotional connection with their children through the games.

Equally important is that the parents can teach their children with the informative games. Nowadays, the children psychologists have written a vast number of the informative books which can improve the children knowing. To illustrate it more I give an example of one of my friends, Hossein. He told me when his brother was the child, his parents had bought a lot of books on the mathematics for him. They played with Hossein’s brother by completing those books and in the result, they taught Hossein’s brother through playing. Consequently, after a while, the marks of the Hossein’s brother improved significantly.
The last but not least is that the children love playing and parents can use it to help them. Although study the schoolwork is really important but the children can do that lonely, instead they need having fun with their parents veritably. Likewise, recent studies on the 7-12-year-old children reveal that the parents can enhance children mental abilities by playing with them.

In brief, with the aforementioned reasons, so I adopt a firm position that the parents should spend their remaining time on the having fun playing with their children. Of course, my opinion has some drawbacks but according to the above paragraphs seem that the best choice is that.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...debates in the psychological societies. Some of the psychologists agree with having fun and...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...th their children through the games. Equally important is that the parents can teach...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, likewise, really, so, well, while, i think, in brief, of course, by the way, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04750593824 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79291689579 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477434679335 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7675153368 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.84 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33604221604 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974077230997 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882662991092 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206007532948 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665949647968 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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