In these days, with the growth of electronic devises, celebrities can speak to people very easier than before. A question that might arise with respects to this fact is whether the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people or old persons in society. In this way, not only young people spend much longer of their time on internet and other communication’s devices but also they have more time for living than they are older.
That young people spend more time on internet, TV, and radio can be regarded as a persuasive reason to be explained. Strictly speaking, young members of society watch TV, and use many communication’s application on their cell phones more than the other people who lives in society. When they use more, they see the opinion of celebrities more than the others who spend less time for this kind of activities. To elucidate it, my cousin use Instagram and watch TV in his free time. In those gadgets, he see the opinion of famous actor “Parviz Parastoii” about water storage and how we can restrict it. When he see this opinion, think about this is so important and he should spend his time to this. If he does not use Instagram, he does not see the post of water shortage.
Another reason which is equally important, if not more, is that the young people generally have more time for living. Generally Speaking, They have many dreams and many energy to spend to their goals. Delving further into the issue reveals that Young members of each society feel need help to choose the best way to run to their dreams and when a celebrities – who could be successful- give an opinion about something, young people tend to hear it and use it in their lives. As an illustration, the result of some research in phycology field conducted in high ranked universities unveiled the fact that not until young people have more time to live, have they many big dreams and need help to recognize the best way to them.
All details considered, I am convinced that the younger people recognize the opinions of celebrities more important than older peoples should take precedence over the other preference. However, this fact might not be overgeneralized to all condition. Undoubtedly, there are so many older people who loves a specific celebrity and follow his/her opinions. This is why it is highly recommended the experts contemplate on this matter scrupulously.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'sees'.
Suggestion: sees
... in his free time. In those gadgets, he see the opinion of famous actor 'Parvi...
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Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'sees'.
Suggestion: sees
...age and how we can restrict it. When he see this opinion, think about this is so im...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun energy seems to be countable; consider using: 'many energies'.
Suggestion: many energies
...lly Speaking, They have many dreams and many energy to spend to their goals. Delving furthe...
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Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a celebrity' or simply 'celebrities'?
Suggestion: a celebrity; celebrities
...est way to run to their dreams and when a celebrities – who could be successful- give an opin...
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Line 5, column 726, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...help to recognize the best way to them. All details considered, I am convinced t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88807785888 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79782713566 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484184914842 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8042674319 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.611111111 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.94444444444 5.45110844103 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182193100109 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675234526647 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554955854416 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132831233148 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437669765359 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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