Both the author and lecturer discuss the benefits and consequences of electronic data base for medical information about patients. Whereas the author posits that there are three beneficial reasons, the lecturer refutes this claim, casting doubt on every single point made by the author.
First, the author argues that the use of electronic records can reduce the amount of money are wasted by copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one hospital to another. Manually database needs many space to storage them, But electronic database does not need a large space for storing data. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that many doctors tend to store paper version of that information for emergency cases. This show that although the electronic database is modern and good way of storing, money are payed for paper stuff any way.
Second, whereas the author believes that the electronic data with united font and style reduces the amount of human mistakes, the professor counters that argument by asserting that many doctors still use pen and paper for complete their project about their patients and they note very important things very fast with pour hand-writing. It is obvious that the human mistakes occurred too in this way of storing and recalling the notes and information.
Finally, the reading asserts that researchers can access to the information of medical centers very easier than before and use them to further researches. In contrast, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that researchers must have permission to access this kind of information. It is a rule of United State of America that the information of patients who go to the medical centers are privacy and no one can reach those without a hard permission which is toke long time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun space seems to be countable; consider using: 'many spaces'.
Suggestion: many spaces
...tal to another. Manually database needs many space to storage them, But electronic databas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, second, so, still, whereas, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12627986348 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54997459617 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563139931741 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.9794730727 49.2860985944 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.545454545 110.228320801 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 21.698381199 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402936744752 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135022723307 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100650173046 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19911293008 0.162205337803 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109567119812 0.0443174109184 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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