By and large it is established beyond doubt celebrities play a prominentrole in all societies. They have somehow control culture of a countries.some people believe that celebrities, such as entertainers and athletes,are more important to younger people than they are to older people. othersdisagree. In my view, celebreties are more important to younger people than
older people for two important reasons.
First of all, young people have some special sychological features. One of them is they want to be famuse when they grew up. For example when I was 16 years old, I was so ambitious. I can remember that I spend a lot of
my time on internet and following news about cellebrites. I loved Michel jackson very much. I try to learn the dance that he performed. In school my friends and I spent most of breaktimes show how much we learn and compete
each other. When I heard the news of his death, I became depressed for mounth because I can't believe that my hero killed hisself. My family notice changes in my behavier and they take me to a doctor. This issue takes several mounth
to solved. During that period, I consume pills and stay away from normal life. As you can see, celebrites have huge impact on young people.
Second, as I mentioned in first reason, young people try to do what celebrites do. Most of young people want to have a model and imitate their behavier and charateristics. For example, in my country Asghar Farhdy is a famous
filme maker. Last year an enormuse earthquake happended in a city and many people died and some people losed thier home. When this news broadcast, he post on his Instagram and wanted from every body to donate money to build
home for them. This earthquake happended just 3 mounths befor winter, but when winter arrived nobody was homeless. Even many young pepole went there and helped to constractions. This experience taught me that how important
celebreties are for young people.
In sum, not only does celebrites is important for young people, but also
they have huge imapct on them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, such as, by and large, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83002832861 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71292276399 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57790368272 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2679751801 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0416666667 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7083333333 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.53405017921 265% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189745774355 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483220383285 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805082136115 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0738106669132 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805520208533 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.