TPO 54 Task 1
The reading and lecture are both about the problems that result from fast evaporation in the Salton Sea in California, the most critical issue is a decrease in fish and bird population. The author of the passage proposes three solutions while the lecturer disputes the claims made in the excerpt.
According to the reading, the high salt levels should be decreased with heating water of the lack and separate salt and other materials that would be condensed and returned to the lack. This fact is challenged by the lecturer. She claims that this leads to augment further materials such as poison materials.
Secondly, the author suggests that ocean water decreases the salt of the lake because it has fewer salt than the lake and the ocean water can transfer through canals. The lecturer, however, asserts that the distance of the ocean from the lake is far-reaching and the government should have cost so much and it is not affordable.
Finally, the author posits that dividing the lack to the several parts respectively small to large due to decreasing the salt level in the large section because the small part would be more condensed and the large part receives freshwater from the river. In contrast, the lecturer's stance is the small part is too weak and some natural accidents such as earthquakes could destroy the walls especially the small wall.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 272, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lecturers'' or 'lecturer's'?
Suggestion: lecturers'; lecturer's
...hwater from the river. In contrast, the lecturers stance is the small part is too weak an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1131.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 229.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93886462882 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49880885412 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558951965066 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 618.680645161 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.8326885346 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4444444444 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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