tpo indepemdent 23
Many people think that working fast and quickly will save them time. They say that the now a day life rhythm is fast and they should keep up with the pace. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that working a little more slowly is better because this will decrease the risk of doing mistakes, and decrease the work tension.
First, working quickly leads to a lot of mistakes that can cause horrible results. Sometimes as we do our work quickly, mistakes may happen that is not easily spotted in the same moment. I can remember one of my friends who work as a pharmacist, used to work always in hurry. He dispensed a wrong drug to a patient (has a quite similar spelling to the right drug). Because he works fast, he didn't recognize that even the dispensed drug can't treat the man's illness. This led to a died patient. On contrast to that, one other friend who works as a pharmacist as well, works in a steady pace, she saved a patient’s life when she saw a medicine contra-act with the other medicines in the prescription. She called the physician and brought his attention to the drug interactions. He thanked her and correct the prescription. Mistakes not always minor, some of them can cause major action like life threatening, so we have keep a steady pace of work to avoid those mistakes.
Second, life is so hard on us on this time we live right now. It is full of responsibilities, which make us always under tension. Near work dead line is one of the things that makes us very stressed. For more illustration, my husband who works as an engineer faced with many deadlines for the projects he works on. I can see him most of time stressed, worried about the projects, worried about his capability of finishing them on time. I feel that soon he will need to use tranquilizers or antianxiety drugs. I can't imagine this young man in his thirties be treated with those drugs, and this all because he has to work in a very fast rhythm. On the other hand, I am a laid-back person, who deal with all the situation in a more quiet motion. I see myself still smiling despite the challenges I face every day as a mom or as an employee. In same time, I meet all my deadlines, my son never went to school without being done with his homework, my house is quite clean all the time, my work is always on time. Working more slowly will decrease tension and led to the same result (if not better) of good working.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I encourage all those who work quickly to try to slow down a little bit. If you did that you will discover for yourself how much it is better for your own life and for the others' lives.
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- TPO-43 - Independent Writing Task Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do?-Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wa 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 255, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'work'.
Suggestion: always work
...iends who work as a pharmacist, used to work always in hurry. He dispensed a wrong drug to ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e right drug. Because he works fast, he didnt recognize that even the dispensed drug ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 435, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... recognize that even the dispensed drug cant treat the mans illness. This led to a d...
^^^^
Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...use tranquilizers or antianxiety drugs. I cant imagine this young man in his thir...
^
Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e tranquilizers or antianxiety drugs. I cant imagine this young man in his thirties ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... who work quickly to try to slow down a little bit. If you did that you will discover for ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, still, well, as to, i feel, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40643863179 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52101997233 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503018108652 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.930555273 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1111111111 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4074074074 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25925925926 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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