TPO1
Controversy exists over whether the amount of financial support that is given to sports and social activities by universities and colleges should be equivalent to that of classes and libraries. I believe, however, sports and social activities are by far more important than classes and libraries since they help students enhance their personal lives, develop social skills, and make progress in their academic studies.
The first aspect to point out is that sports and social activities have a positive influence on students’ personal lives. Gathering together to do sports helps students take a break from hectic life and unwind by playing their favorite sports. Consider students who go to sports clubs after their classes. Not only can this activity make them more energetic, but also they may forget about their exam failures. Moreover, some despondent students, who are doing badly in their exams, may have another opportunity to prove their abilities while taking part in sports competitions and feel pleased with themselves. That is to say, the sense of accomplishment which is gained from doing sports can raise their self-esteem.
Another more subtle point is that students can improve their social life through sports and social activities. Joining social groups enables students to socialize with their friends and cement their relationships. Students from different parts of the world, who may have diverse viewpoints, can spend time together and share ideas. Furthermore, sports clubs can provide programs to help extremely introverted students develop social skills. Exciting carefully planned competitions get shy students to join them and practice spending time with other people.
Finally yet importantly, taking part in sports and having social activities assist students in achieving progress in their studies. Competing in sports teaches students how to make determined efforts to succeed. Hardly does anyone make progress without an incentive. Some coaches can inspire their players to struggle for their dreams. They psychologically boost their morale to try hard, and they can stimulate them to make the same efforts for their studies to acquire better grades. In addition, students who attend clubs tend to do things on schedule to maintain a balance between their social activities and university tasks. Although they may find carrying out the plan tough, they soon notice its tangible benefits through their superb performance at both university and club.
To summarize, it is a wise decision to consider sports and social activities to acquire more financial support than classes and libraries due to making students improve their personal life, intensify social skills, and achieve progress in their studies. In fact, studying is not the student’s whole life. It is high time we stopped focusing on improving classes and libraries and overlooking the fact that student's physical and mental health is closely connected with doing sports and social activities. That is why, the more facilities we offer them, the better we make college students reach their goals.
- TPO 34 81
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 68
- TPO 47 63
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries 76
- Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: sport
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...ng sports can raise their self-esteem. Another more subtle point is that studen...
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...ctice spending time with other people. Finally yet importantly, taking part in ...
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Suggestion: Finally,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, while, in addition, in fact, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2628.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.475 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6672395218 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516666666667 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1240507507 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04166666667 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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