TPO21 – Independent: A/D? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

In order to achieve success in life people need to have certain qualities such as persistence, knowledge and ability to relate well with other people. However, in my view the most important quality to achieve success is to perform hard work in school.

First of all, hard work provides you with the tool of knowledge. When you study hard, you get good grades, you become more knowledgeable in your the field of education. This helps you in achieving success in your future job. For example, because I studied anatomy sincerely during my college days, I am able to diagnose my patients more effectively. The ability to get good along with my coworker wouldn't have helped me in making a correct diagnosis. So to become a successful doctor my knowledge is more helpful to me.

Furthermore, you land up in good career path. By studying hard, you get good grades. Because of that you get recruited in a prestigious company. The prime criteria to get into renowned company is your grades along with other requirements. For instance, while selecting candidates for an interview the first and foremost criteria they sort the candidates is their grades. Then other attributes are taken into consideration. Many companies reject candidates with less GPA. They might be good communicators but they didn't even get a chance to communicate face to face to prove themselves.

Finally, someone might argue that getting along with people is more important criteria to achieve success. I disagree this because not all job requires you to work with people. Some scientists, computer programmers, freelancers or professionals working from home doesn't work with people. They work in isolation. But, it is essential for them to have good knowledge in their respective field to have a successful career; which can be achieved by studying hard in school.

To conclude, ability to relate well is a plus point but studying sincerely in school is more essential for overall growth and success in future career.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07294832827 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78395892341 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6291169675 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8636363636 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9545454545 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277638940301 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806400880458 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911326390894 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20018620739 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108075985968 0.0645574589148 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.53 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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