TPO#35
From a general standpoint, in today's modern society, we observe in which people are are striving to notice about individual's life, especially famous entertainers or athletes in many radically different ways. one of the controversial issues occupying the mind is whether well-known people deserve to have more privacy or they have to share all their moment with their fans. To the extent that my perspective is concerned, I will concur that, nowadays, famous people should have more privacy than they have now. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first significant reason coming to mind is that many famous people are struggling to help society, especially youth to teach them how to do their best or how to behave in order to achieve goals or make impressive accomplishment, which means young people like to follow the famous people because they think that these kinds of human beings are superior to other common people. Moreover, famous people are trying to interact with them efficiently. but several people do some improper actions resulting in reducing famous people's activities in the society. consequently, the people who have effective interaction with famous people are deprived from these communications. this example makes my point explicit. one of the famous athletes in my country has been trying to guide young people to eat balanced meals and to avoid consuming junk foods and processed foods. this kind of message leads to positive consequences in society, for instance, help people to have a healthy a satisfactory life. Unfortunately, because of breaking the private life of this athlete, his heart was broken, and he decided to no longer advise people in the community. this example illustrates how important the private life of a famous person can be not only for themselves but also for people being his fan.
The second equally noteworthy reason is that privacy provides famous people with wonderful opportunities to feel a sense of satisfaction in their live. If someone disrupts famous people's privacy, he definitely makes them unhappy. we are not able to deny the fact that everyone is struggling with many difficulties to have free tension life, so famous people are not an exception to this principle. they should have the chance of setting their minds at ease from all negative thoughts in their daily life. Hence, they need privacy like ordinary people all around the world. A few days ago, I heard horrible news pertaining to the retirement of one actor who is very talented in the field of theater and cinema. Then, I was curious about what happened that he made such an important decision, I understood that he was tired of people who did not let him live with ease. Had he had a more private life, he would certainly have continued his profession for several years.
To wrap it up, contemplating all aforementioned remarks, we reach the conclusion that although the majority of well-known people are developing a strong interest in absorbing all possible attention in the society, but it is not a wise idea to disrupt their privacy because it can lead to improper consequences such as sadness or even early retirement.
TPO#35
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, then, well, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2730.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08379888268 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78067914046 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521415270019 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 864.0 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.0885057106 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.090909091 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4090909091 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0263973454615 0.236089414692 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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