TPO35-Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now
Over the past few dacades, the issue of whether celeberities should receive more privacy has received a great deal of attention from people and sociologists. Although some may argue that people are interested to famous persons and they enthutiastic to know their life, I as well as many others believe that celebrities deserve to have complete privacy and the following explantations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, a pramount reason why famous persons should receive more privacy is that the multi medias all around the world want to appealing people by interesting news like cleberities' life. Famous people as much as regular people qualified to have a privacy and spending their time either with their family or friends on relief; however, journalisms, especially paparazzis, always distrupt their life without their permission to finde a news which might be amazing for their readers. As a result, well-known people virtually struggle with these conditions in their life.
A further reason for this view is that the evolution of the technology causes to disperse of the information in a very short time. This means that, celeberities always on the attention of the regular people as well and their life can be watched and captured by the people all around the world through the social medias. Consequently, they cannot get a well privacy which they are desereved to have.
Finally, it is occasionally said that attention the the famous people has been increased on the previous decades, which in turn augments the favor of the nation to the famous people's life style. In addition, large number of the people believe that one of the side effects of being famous is to have a unrestricted life; since, they think they have a right to have knowledge about their favourite celeberities' life in every moment.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementiond reasons, I can draw the conclusion that nowadays, famous people should receive more privacy chiefly due to the development of the technology and the growth of the attention of the people to their life.
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Suggestion: dispersing
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Suggestion: the; the
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, so, well, in addition, in brief, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15204678363 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77342225473 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505847953216 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.579276984 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.181818182 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0909090909 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209556863906 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970348366381 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882496454704 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138684531198 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513620064943 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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