TPO47 Independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Globalization is an overwhelming world trend. Walking the streets of Seoul, Madras, Cairo, and Shanghai, we see people wearing jeans, hear familiar pop music, and read advertisements for many of the same products. Thus, some argue that it is important wo know about events happening around the world, despite the fact that they can barely affect our daily life. I fundamentally agree with this view that we should be aware of global affairs because they can expand our outlook and actually have a long-term influence on our everyday life.
First, knowing about what is going on around the world help people to broaden their horizons. In the past, people had narrow prospect due to the limitation of transportation. Inhabitants in some western countries could never image the taste of tea and the clothes made of silk; while eastern world people could not understand how to use forks and knives to cut a steak. However, today due to the coverage of mass media, we can easily have access to abundant information about foreign culture and custom, even though many of us may have never stepped out of our home countries. For example, although people living near the equator might never have a chance to enjoy skiing in the local community, they can appreciate a range of winter sports, including snowboarding, ice hockey, speed skating, etc., by watching Winter Olympics on the TV or via the Internet. Therefore, global events enable people to expand general knowledge of various subjects - the rule of a winter sports game, the damage of an earthquake, the coronation ceremony of a queen.
Moreover, it is essential to be aware of foreign affairs because we need to communicate with people in other parts of the world. The unprecedented booming of technology, e.g. airplanes, the Internet and satellites, are making the world a small village where we often need to exchange ideas with different people frequently. Today more than ever, we can see businessmen negotiating with international clients, scientists from different regions conducting an experiment together, and students taking online courses taught by an overseas professor. How can one meet new people from other countries and communicate with them if he is so close minded without knowing anything that happening around him? He would be extremely ignorant and feel lost in the multicultural world as he could not learn from others' experience, opinion and advice.
Admittedly, sometimes a worldwide event can cast little impact on our daily life. My opponent might argue against me that he would take the same subway line to go to work at the same company after knowing that some international companies gone bankruptcy. The influence of such events, however, would affect our life in an indirect and long-term way. Take my major, computer science, for example. Ten years ago, the number of students choosing this major surged due to the booming computer industry; then suddenly this figure dropped because students were worried about outsourcing to distant regions as IT engineers; but now with the supportive policy to computer engineers, IT industry thrives again. Therefore, global events and policies can have a profound influence on our career perspective and our daily life as a whole.
In the final analysis, although events occurring around the world seldom affect our life immediately, it helps us to gain international insight and facilitate cross-country interaction and communication. So I believe that knowing about things happening around the world is of great significance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, e.g., first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2984.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 571.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22591943958 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81552782422 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 320.0 212.727598566 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560420315236 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 923.4 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9173739543 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.739130435 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8260869565 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193529805428 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609173302394 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639197583346 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125032258851 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536091189567 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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