Traveling to other countries is a way for people to escape from their daily worries. When visiting a foreign country, some people like to go to tourist attractions while others prefer going to quiet places where they can truly enjoy the country's culture.
Which do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Make sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Nowadays, the gap between the countries are not that wide anymore. Travel around the world is more easily and convenient. Some people enjoy to visit the tourist attractions during their trip. Other people perfer quiet places where they can truly enjoy the country. Well, in my opinion, I would like to go to quiet places during my trip. There are two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the quiet places can know the country's culture more deeper than the tourist attractions. Because at the tourist attractions are always crowded with foreign people. It is too noisy to appretiate the local vibe. My experience is the best illustration of this. Ten years ago, I went to America with my family. In our trip, we didn't go to the tourist attrctions which recommend on the Internet. We asked our friends there for some advices about where is worthwile to visit. The place just has some local people, none of the foreign visiter expect my family and I. We had definitly forgot we were the visitors, all of my family members got involved in the exotic culture and acted like the local people. After the trip, we had significantly knew about the culture in the place. That trip is the best exprience of my whole life.
Secondly, lots of tourist attrations become commercial rather than indiginous anymore. The food in there might be modified to attract the tourism or even the people surrouding you is from everywhere instead of native people. None of the things in the tourist spots are from that culture because the company wants to receive more profit from the tourists. They might extrapolate some special cultural events which are not available in the local. However, all of the tourism in the tourist spots might believe in their commercial strategies and spend lots of money on it. In this case, we can not truly know about the country's culture. On the other hand, the quiet places where the company donesn't have any profit could let visitors truly know about the origin culture in the country.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that when visiting a foreign country, going to quiet places could definitly enjoy the country's culture more than the tourist attractions. There not only have more local vibe and behaviors, but also less commercial strategies used in that area.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy visiting'.
Suggestion: enjoy visiting
...more easily and convenient. Some people enjoy to visit the tourist attractions during their tr...
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Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'deeper' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: deeper
...et places can know the countrys culture more deeper than the tourist attractions. Because a...
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Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re deeper than the tourist attractions. Because at the tourist attractions are always c...
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Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...America with my family. In our trip, we didnt go to the tourist attrctions which reco...
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Line 3, column 751, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...e. After the trip, we had significantly knew about the culture in the place. That tr...
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Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...urism or even the people surrouding you is from everywhere instead of native peopl...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...re not available in the local. However, all of the tourism in the tourist spots might beli...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85606060606 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40000908707 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492424242424 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6915393309 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.9615384615 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2307692308 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364100882728 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915970185444 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916086368148 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239204058766 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760838019137 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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