at universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive financial support
without a shadow of doubt, nowaday allover our vast world education plays an undeniable role in societies. universities are the most valuable part of the education system and have gain lots of attention for centuries. most universities have so many facilities and in the modern era, social activities are an important part of students' life. An ineluctable query which always has been the topic of contention and brought about heated debates is wheater it is worthy to support sport and other social activities or better beter to just concentrate on classes and libraries. I adhere to the idea that these kinds of activities are as much important and forgetting them can cause too many problems in students' future lives. In what follows I will cogently delve into my paramount reasons to justify my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that these kinds of social activities can construct someone's behavior in the future. Through these activities, one learns how to communicate efficiently with others. NIOSH, national institute of safety and health, last year announced factors that one needs to be successful and happy in life. social life and the ability to communicate with others are among the most important ones. In the modern era, someone without the ability to socialize has no chance to become successful. because most of our behaviors are formed when we are teenagers so I think these kinds of activities are as important as studying.
Another equally noteworthy reason is that in these ages mental and physical health is so important even more than obtaining degrees. WHO, world health organization, recently revealed a study that shows most people that suffer obesity, had started to accumulate fat in their youth. so sports activities are necessary for life, especially for young people to stay in shape. In another article WHO announced that most criminals suffer mental problems that have roots in their childhood or youth. These kinds of activities help teenagers to overcome their problems and forget them even for a short period and be happy. human motivations based on Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs, include physiological needs, safety, love, esteem, and happiness. so happiness can open new doors in front of them and make them a useful person for society.
There is a theory called "The Butterfly Effect " that claims a small change can cause an enormous result in the future, that is the main reason I think these types of investments may not seem logical at first but in long term can make the society more active and much happier. To recapitulate, considering the mentioned reasons above one can conclude that these types of social activities like sports worth investigation and should receive equal financial support. There are other reasons and examples elaborating on this idea which are not mentioned above due to the shortage of time.
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- at universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive financial support 70
- TPO 01 Independent Do you agree or disagree with the following statement At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support Use specific reasons and examples 70
- Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people 73
- TPO 01 At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68936119807 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7654392849 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.727272727 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.45454545455 5.45110844103 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214167780693 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548260518677 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068942697271 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123159408291 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558449174464 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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