we need zoos. Do you agree or disagree.

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we need zoos. Do you agree or disagree.

That zoos play a negative role in the health and the life of the variety of animals is an undeniable fact. Should experts realize the disadvantages of zoos in the environment, a spirit of animals and the spreading of violent behaver toward animals, they will ponder over it much more scrupulously. This issue has recently been the topic of debate among animal rights activists.
I believe that zoos have negative influence toward freedom of animals and they are in prison cruelly and humans have brutal behavior than animals when we prison them in zoos, and these are my justification, to begin with, personally I suggested that we shouldn’t keep animals in prisons that we say them zoos, first reason is that, once my family and I went to Tehran zoo when I was ten years old. I see animals very sad and depressing, the worst view I saw that was very beautiful eagle cannot fly and lions were in very tight rooms. Thus that day was one of the bad days of my lifetime. The second reason why I advocate this point of view liaising the fact that animals must be free and life where they belong. When we keep animals in a zoo some people give them a cigarette and another thing not suitable for them, for instance, we can see chimpanzees addict to cigarette or some the man that they keep animals in the zoo have brutal behaver with them. Therefore creating a zoo in cities isn’t a good idea.
Having discussed the issue from that point of view, I would rather look at it from another perspective, because I believe an English proverb that says “everything has two sides”, as well, some kind of animals like pandas can’t live in their settlement because humans destroyed their habitat so pandas have been kept in zoos. With this point of view, zoos are useful.
By taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, the following consideration can drown about the issue. Underestimating disadvantages of a zoo in a life of animals and ignoring their law is not logical. Attending to this issue meticulously contributes to protecting settlement of animals and granting them freedom, and can improve several aspects of our communications with animals.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 541, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...fly and lions were in very tight rooms. Thus that day was one of the bad days of my ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 962, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... the zoo have brutal behaver with them. Therefore creating a zoo in cities isn't a g...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, well, another thing, for instance, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87096774194 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85065404175 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545698924731 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.036002403 48.9658058833 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 129.428571429 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0602216329206 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0141643579102 0.076458572812 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324864807239 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0268437848183 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343092383158 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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