We need zoos. Do you agree or disagree? Why? Give examples and reasons to support your opinion
In my perspective, I agree that we need zoos because they are educational, they are fun and they can protect from which animals are in edge of extinction.
First, the zoos are educational. People can increase their knowledge when they go to zoos. They can learn about animal mating habitant and food behavior. The zoo give them open view about animals that they never seen ago. For example when i was 12 years-old, my father took me to zoo, I did not see predator animals like lion before. I just read about it from books or TV. I really liked lions and tigers, so when I saw them, I was so excited, and they are very bigger than my imagination.
Second, the zoos are fun, many people go to the zoo and enjoy from seeing most animals are pretty beautiful like Peacock. They can use this space instead of wild environment that they may never experience. For instance, my family every summer go to “Mashhad zoo”. My mother makes finger foods. We spend all days with together and see animals. All of kids pleasure and they visit the beautiful animals. It makes all family enjoy from their free time and they can have time without internet.
Third, the zoo can protect those animals are scare and they are in edge of extinction. The authorities of zoo can treat these animal and give them safety place. The veterinarians help some animals and give them vital material that necessary for their growing. Every year 20 percent of all population of pandas decrease and this condition is worrying. For example when i was student in medical college, my friend was veterinarian. He has been work in zoo. He looked after pandas for six month. Every day he controlled their behavior and type of their foods. He improved their physical condition. He could save their life. Now they have two children and their generation are keeping. So the zoo can big help to their surviving.
In conclusion, there is a convincing argument, why we need zoo. In my opinion, the zoo can be benefit for us, because it is educational, exciting and good place for animals are in edge of extinction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, really, second, so, third, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68119891008 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5230489438 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523160762943 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2323281425 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 59.2413793103 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.6551724138 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86206896552 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0679602065438 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0206729594659 0.076458572812 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383288958059 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0567488938367 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383736056302 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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