Do you enjoy your life? The term “enjoy” is one of the abstract words I know. How to enjoy your life and what enjoyment is are subjective depending on environments you are in, personalities and ages, etc. However, I would like to focus on how many opportunities people can get to enjoy their lives in the case of whether young people enjoy life more than older people do or not. I agree to the statement since young people can get more opportunities than older people in several reasons.
In modern society, technology is rapidly improving. “Digital literacy” is getting important to survive in modern society. A company looks for and hires people who can handle digital systems and make use of technology. Handling technology and digital-based devices is connected with enjoying life. Young people are familiar with technology and can have fun with it. They watch Netflx or Youtube to take a rest and even get reference for their tasks from work. It can make their lives easier and relaxed, which help improve happiness and enjoy their lives. On the other hand, older people do not know about technology, and very new to them in general. They are not able to use it, so they can not get a chance to enjoy games or things that you can do with digital devices.
Besides, young people are much healthier than older people. It is obvious that young people have more opportunities to have physically- satisfied activities. They can go to gym, do team sports such as basketball and football, and do extreme sports like hiking skyscrapers to relieve their stress while older people stay home saving their strengths. Although vigorous activities are not equivalent to life-enjoyment, there is no doubt that freedom of movements can give you multiple choices in your life to get rid of stress and enjoy the moments.
Lastly, young people can choose whatever they want without caring of where they are and whom they stay with. Old people have their own families including spouses and kids because they have responsibilities to take care of their houses. Also, in company, who in charge of are and whose status is high are usually old people not young people. If there is important contract with other company, during this it is difficult for them to take a vacation or go home early. But, for young people, there is only one person they have to care about. It is oneself. They can deal with their times, and schedules without letting families know. For example, if they want to go traveling the world by oneself and they have to quit their jobs to go, they are willing to quit and go since they are young and able to get a new job soon.
To sum up, I think young people can get much more chances and opportunities than old people can get because of their relevance of technology, healthy body, and less responsibilities to others.
- TOEFL T P O 5 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 161, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun responsibilities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...evance of technology, healthy body, and less responsibilities to others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, lastly, look, so, while, for example, i think, in general, no doubt, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78904665314 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66629137299 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466531440162 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3738017046 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4444444444 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2592592593 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14814814815 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439419944085 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137788484383 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14722617492 0.0737576698707 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316446394851 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181146916497 0.0645574589148 281% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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