The 20th century has brought with many advances and many progression, with those advances humans’ lives, have become more and more complicated and their lives have changed dramatically. As far as I concerned I believe that One of the most drastic changes which have taken place recently is that people haven’t helped the community to prosper. The seen to be a number of issues associated with this fact, I would explore some on important issues which are more conspicuous for me in the following essay.
First and foremost, people nowadays are overwhelmed with their diurnal tasks and their part-time and full-job, so obviously they don’t have spare time in their life in order to help the community. My experience would be a great example of this issue, when I graduated from school the thought of marriage and finding new job had been preoccupied me, therefore I couldn’t even concentrate in my affair so I even forgot the simplest thing in my life.
The second issue we should take into consideration is the people’s priority. In these day people just tend to think about their own life and they become more indifference and apathetic due to the drastic cultural amendment. they don’t want to think about their community and people who live in community, statistic shows that people in past tended to live in joint family which all member of family live in peace and harmony under the one roof which helped them to become more responsible in society and their own private life rather than people in current time tend to live in nuclear family which make people more apathetic. Additionally, from my perspective, I believe that we don't make culture culprit for this behavior.
Due to the aforementioned reason which I have explored above I believe that in these day people don’t take the communication so serious, it can be surmised that if we don’t help the community in order to prosper we just help that to get closer to calamity. Therefore, I strongly encourage people to participate to set up some public-government partnership in order to help our community to flourish.
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- TOEFL T P O 40 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun progression seems to be countable; consider using: 'many progressions'.
Suggestion: many progressions
...tury has brought with many advances and many progression, with those advances humans' lives...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... due to the drastic cultural amendment. they don't want to think about their co...
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Line 3, column 690, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... from my perspective, I believe that we dont make culture culprit for this behavior....
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Line 3, column 735, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...make culture culprit for this behavior. Due to the aforementioned reason which I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01699716714 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90549380402 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524079320113 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.2626888166 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.0 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0909090909 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228237930373 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910050518163 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084798490869 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143275827858 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395217585358 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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