Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country Who would you choose

People express the disparate opinions on that, when my city- Kathmandu, the capital city of Nepal, decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person of my nation- Nepal. From my perspective, Prithivi Narayan Shah is the best person to build that statue or monument in as much as the following reasons.

First, Prithivi Narayan Shah was the originator of the Nepal, he firstly started to unite our country Nepal, when our country Nepal was divided into several realms. Informing the citizen about the importance of unification was the main duty of Shah and we cannot unify, if Prithivi Narayan shah did not initiate the unification. For example, at that time, even the Kathmandu Valley was divided into three realms and he united the valley and set up the capital city. If he did not set up the capital city, after that, it was not possible to combine in as much as the foreigner invasion.

Next, today, some people of our city-Kathmandu want to go against the nationalism. To provide the importance of nationalism, the statue or monument of Shah can be useful. For example, in Pokhara- the second largest city of Nepal, when the city plans to build the momentum of the Gautam Buddha – the light of Asia, then emotionally people stop to talks about the social disturbance caused by racism. In addition, the discrimination between the people is going to decrease. Likewise, our nationality in our city can be enhanced by building the momentum of Shah.

Further, the momentum supports the tourism, if we made that appealing. A myriad of people are attracted to that momentum and spend their time, which is beneficial for the city. For example, a foreigner can observe and understand about the Prithivi Narayan Shah, so that he spends the whole time in Kathmandu valley.

In conclusion, the Prithivi Narayan shah’s statue or momentum should be made in as much as he was the originator of Nepal, it effects emotionally and supports the tourism.

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Suggestion: talk
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, likewise, second, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92814371257 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69124873427 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47005988024 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2206442531 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.733333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123072989539 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480700307107 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729369455887 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835988985301 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10567450877 0.0645574589148 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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