Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why? – A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or – A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
Throughout history, a study has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, researchers have always searched many ways for enhancing educational systems. Some people may hold the view that a student would better choose a major with consist of a few years of study, but make opportunities a full time jobs. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that a student must select a major with several years of study, but it will make several opportunities career. I content that a student has indulged by choosing the second option. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that choosing a major which need several years of study helps a student learn many things. To elaborate on my point, when students select this major, they must study for several years. In these years, they will pass several subjects and lessons related to their major. They will pass some laboratory courses which help them learn a beneficial way. Also, they will pass some practical courses that they will spend many times on companies or factories. In this situation, they will make a strong CV and background in their field of study. However, if they choose a major that needs a few years of study, students must pass only partial lessons without practical courses. These students will learn only a basic of their major. Hence, they will not have a strong background and CV that helps them in future.
Another reason which deserves some word here is that students with strong knowledge have more options for future occupations. To shed more light on this matter, owing to studying several years, students will become an expert person on a major. These students have several options for choosing their occupation that they prefer to work on it. Hence, they will have a better future by selecting their favorite jobs. In this situation, they will try to improve on their career and become a flourishing and expert person on their work. Besides, since this labor force has a strong CV, they would able to achieve a high-rank job with high salary. But, when students select a major with a few years of study, they will not have strong knowledge on it. Therefore, they will not have many options for choosing their jobs so that they may not choose a favorite job. In this situation, they do not like to do their work as they can, and these labor forces will not progressive on their occupations.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that students better select a major that needs several years of study, but it has several work opportunities. I believe that students with this major not only will improve their knowledge but also will become an expert person on a special major.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ears of study, but make opportunities a full time jobs. However, some others may take an ...
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Line 9, column 841, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...trong background and CV that helps them in future. Another reason which deserves ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 9.8082437276 275% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90702479339 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5100746392 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404958677686 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1137033185 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3461538462 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6153846154 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.80769230769 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147903137637 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580169236004 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490945938645 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121091530266 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283973136872 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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