Although the sale of rhinoceros horns is illegal worldwide, rhinoceroses (Rhinos) are commonly poached (hunted illegally) for their horns, which can be sold for tens of thousands of dollars per kilogram. Rhino horns are so valuable that one type of rhino is already extinct because poachers killed too many of them. All rhinos may soon become extinct unless something is done to help save them. Several ideas have been suggested
The article states that rhinoceros are become extiction because of the overuse of their horns by illegal hunter and provides three ideas for supporting these species.However, the professor explains that the extinction of this kind of species is more serious and all three idea presented in the reading have weaknesses, and refutes each author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that by removing rhinoceros' horns their lives maybe protected. The professor opposes this point by saying that if we think this idea is both practical and applicable, as well as a governmet has a time and money, the survival chance of these species would be reduced dramatically. because rhinoceros use their horns not only for digging water and surging food, but also they use for protectiong their youngs and their teritory. She also states that this idea
Second, the article posits that another possible solution to reduce illegally hunting rhinoceros is educate people. In contrast, the professor says that these people, rhinoceros hunters, have strong and old ideas and believes regard to the rhinoceros hunting and it is a difficult task to change their mind.
Third, the reading says that governments could sell rhino horns legally to cut all illegally hunt. The professor casts doubt on this point by saying that this idea has unpredictable consequences. if governments sell rhino's horn in the market, more people would pay more attention to buy horns. in addition, this could increase the horn's prices in the market and more hunter therfore killing more rhino due to large and lucritive prices.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, well, as for, in addition, in contrast, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2421875 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62629014055 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55078125 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.5438436453 49.2860985944 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.2 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4 7.06452816374 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241628086113 0.272083759551 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105041882072 0.0996497079465 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654675873203 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140637658098 0.162205337803 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034636838213 0.0443174109184 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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