the reading and the lecture are about alturism, which is a type of behavior that can be found in humans and animals, in which the human or animal sacrifice its own interest for that of another member.the author of the reading feels it is the opposite of selfishness the individuals doing altruism acts gain nothing for themselfs. the lectuerer challenges the claims made by the author. she is of the opinion that that those individuals recieve approval and increas their self woth which she refeared to it as non-material benefites.
to begin with, the author argues that in many species of animals they sacrifice food or even their life to assist other members of their group. the author mention the meerkat as an example. he claims that an indivdual acts as a sentinal and stand guard while others looks for food or eat food they already have; looking out for predators. this argumnet is challenged by the lectuerer. she claims accordaing to recent studies that this "sentinel" had already ate before standing guard, so he is doing that on a full stomack unlike the others. and it is often more diffecult to find food.
secondly, the author suggests that this sentinel warn the other members in case of preditor attack and by doing so he revels himself to greater dangor. the lecturer,however, rebuts this by mentioning that since the sentinel is the first to spot a praditor he has greater chance to escape the attack.
- Some young adults want to be independent as soon as possible. While others prefer to live with family member as long as they can. 70
- Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves. Examples of altruism 70
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do. 70
- Professors are normally found in university classrooms offices and libraries doing research and lecturing to their students More and more however they also appear as guests on television news programs giving expert commentary on the latest events in 52
- TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1191.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8612244898 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74603193328 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 363.6 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.6789010512 49.2860985944 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.272727273 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2727272727 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 7.06452816374 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 4.19205298013 358% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236145731927 0.272083759551 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643395900127 0.0996497079465 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125667517492 0.0662205650399 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150445168091 0.162205337803 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151406531703 0.0443174109184 342% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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