Nowadays with the strong presence of technology, some may say that young people enjoy life more than older people do. I am of the opinion that this statement is true. However, there can be some exceptions. And I feel this way for several reasons which I will further elaborate in this essay.
First of all, young people: children and teenagers, have a lot more resources available, in comparison with previous generations. that is mainly to technology, modern technology provided means for entertainment that was unimaginable before. for instance the internet; which gives young people access to millions of movies, books and songs.And this can be quite fun, For example I taught my grandfather how to use the internet the other day, and once he learn how surf it he was blown away with the huge content made available on the internet. My grandfather ended up spending most of his time online reading books that he always wanted to get but he couldn't or listen to old songs. when I thinking of how older people had fun back then it is hard to think who or with what.
Secondly, I believe that young people have the physical ability to travel around and explore the world. In my opinion the early years in an adult life are the most fun, and it is understandable that later in life it wont be as fun. That is why I strongly recommend, myself included, to take advantage of these wonderful years. My grandfather once on a family trip told me that we should not have brought him along he can not do these kind of activities anymore. he also told us that this is our time to have fun.
Finally as I mentioned in the beginning that there can be some exceptions, I still hold my ground and I believe this because age really is just a number, and the person's soul is the really what determine his or her age, like my grandfather who believed that he is too old to have fun, on the other had other old people would be open to the idea.
In conclusion, I believe in general that children and teenagers enjoy life more that old people, that is because the technology and their physical ability, for those reasons I hold this opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in general, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54166666667 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52994222046 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526041666667 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.9084855189 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1875 5.45110844103 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254287066968 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851209226105 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152713011442 0.0737576698707 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150712727533 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107271903084 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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