Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live
performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more
enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons
and examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays people watch live different events on TV which is really enjoyable. However, I prefer to attend in the events instead of watching them on TV. Excitement of being in an event is not comparable to watching that event by TV. In addition, one of my daily schedule is going outside of my home every evening for couple of hours. I think this is not in my characteristic to stay at home for a long period. Therefor, attending to some events is a good reason to going outside.
The atmosphere of an event such as concert or match is very fantastic and this atmosphere is not perfectly transferred by TV. For example, I attended to the most popular football match between FC Barcelona and Real Madrid. The stadium was full of audiences. More than 100/000 fans were encouraging the players who were the best in the world. This was really amazing that I was able to see Ronaldo and Messi who are one of the best players of history. Watching excitement and passion of fans after each essential situation that their team created was fantastic. I believe that people cannot completely feel this situation on the TV.
According to this fact that my job is inactive, I like to increase my physical activities during my leisure time. I am a computer engineer and the nature of my job is to sit behind a desk and work with my laptop for hours every day. This job not only doesn’t have enough physical activity, but also it is sometimes very boring. So, I really need to go outside every evening in order to refresh my mind and do interesting activities. For this reason, I always looking for some exciting and entertaining events that holds in my city.
In conclusion, I prefer to go to different events instead of staying at home a watch those events on TV. Because TV cannot perfectly transmit the atmosphere of those events. In addition, I really need to attend to those events in order to refresh my mind and compensate the lack of physical activities in my workplace.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing at home a watch those events on TV. Because TV cannot perfectly transmit the atmosp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, really, so, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 22.412803532 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 30.3222958057 195% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 351.0 270.72406181 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60968660969 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6585028565 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490028490028 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.8838838822 49.2860985944 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0476190476 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 7.06452816374 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163844346876 0.272083759551 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577244212102 0.0996497079465 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557801235035 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109429310481 0.162205337803 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517231272287 0.0443174109184 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.3589403974 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.2367328918 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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