Dog breeding
Delta
The article introduces the dog breeding industry, which is reciprocally beneficial for humans and dogs. However, the lecturer turns against the article by explaining the ethical consequences of canine genetics and the welfare of dogs.
Although the process of breeding dogs has advanced and commonized as the reading stated, some breeders actually harm dog’s health in general during the process. Take a closer look, the writer claims that nowadays breeders are able to select favorable traits of dogs in order to cultivate the healthier breeds and fertilize more desirable breeds. Yet, the lecturer disagrees with the whole concept of this improved breed process. He mentions that some breeders are known as “Backyard breeders”. They are concerned more about profits than the welfare of dogs. They undertake the process without having a total understanding of the natural breed and ethics. That’s one of the reasons why the lecturer can’t stand the writer.
Second of all, the author asserts that breeders are mostly dog lovers or dog experts. They even know how to standardize the health of dogs and collect precise information for the industry. These dog experts can possibly inbreed dogs to produce more dominant genes of dogs even though alpha dogs have underlying diseases or physical weaknesses. As the speaker says, some breeders overuse the same male dog to breed, and the offspring of the male dog can easily inherit bad genes. For example, some types of dogs have bad hips or heart issues, while others have bone problems.
The last conflict is about the popular culture of dogs. According to the passage, it emphasizes that popular dog culture and media endorse appreciation of various dogs. The pop breed of dogs or dog shows not only prompt a boost of the dog industry, but also educate people to have a more responsible ownership. Nevertheless, the listening part brings up another unethical consequence, which causes the increase of unwanted dogs when people are influenced by popular dogs. The speaker gives an example of dalmatian dogs, a lot of people found out the dalmatian dogs are not as cute as dogs in the 101 dalmatian, so they don’t want to keep them anymore. Therefore, this kind of situation ends up having some dogs killed at shelters because people abandon them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'dogged'.
Suggestion: dogged
...author asserts that breeders are mostly dog lovers or dog experts. They even know h...
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Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...ion for the industry. These dog experts can possibly inbreed dogs to produce more dominant g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, look, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in general, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 378.0 270.72406181 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10846560847 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58596090604 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 145.348785872 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566137566138 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 419.366225166 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6073503364 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.55 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 7.06452816374 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379705663254 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121760394543 0.0996497079465 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099121022849 0.0662205650399 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240430567383 0.162205337803 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705093745869 0.0443174109184 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 63.6247240618 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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