Dog breeding Delta integrated writing #3
La Princesa
Dogs, best known as humans’ best friends, have been mated on purpose by breeders, in order to develop breeds with special and specific traits. By doing this, humans can create a perfect dog breed with the characteristics that they desire. Despite the belief that this is positive for dogs, it might not always be true.
Dog breeders claim that by mating dogs intentionally they are enhancing a dog breed, for some people, this is proof of how much they love and care about these animals. The truth might be a little different. The dog industry has actually created a huge problem for canines. Most of these breeders do not have the knowledge to do this process correctly and just mate dogs wanting to make a profit. They end up exploiting the animals in their backyards and then selling them to anyone, without making sure that the dog will find a nice home.
The obsession for keeping the purity of a breed can also be seen as something negative. Breeders that focus just on the purity of an animal, tend to overuse the same male dog with “great” genes and forget that if this dog carries also a harmful trait, this will be passed to the puppies too. That is why so many pure breeds suffer from genetic disorders. Also, this adds up to the problem of dogs overpopulation.
Another misbelief is that popular culture encourages responsible ownership. When a dog appears in a TV show the breed can become really popular. People go crazy and want to adopt them, so breeders try to reproduce them even more. The problem appears when the owners realize that the breed is not as they watch it on TV, and the poor animals end abandoned in a shelter.
The culture of dog breeders can be seen from some points as something good for these animals, but if you think deeply about it, you can notice how unethical it really is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, really, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 326.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5981595092 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40891310727 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558282208589 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.513606299 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1764705882 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41176470588 7.06452816374 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166404156192 0.272083759551 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591761956283 0.0996497079465 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465247824937 0.0662205650399 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947595351534 0.162205337803 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362428136466 0.0443174109184 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.2367328918 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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