Integrated essay from ETS official guide to toefl test ''Doubts on Rembrandt painting"

Here we deal about the validity of attributing the painting called, ' Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet' to Rembrandt. The reading passage expresses various doubts regarding this attribution and the professor in the audio resolves these doubts and supports that the painting is indeed painted by Rembrandt.

Firstly, regarding the inconsistency between the clothing elements like the servant type hat and the rich fur collar, the professor brings up the point that, extensive examination using X-Ray techniques, etc by many experts revealed that the fur collar is not part of the original painting by was added several years later by someone intending to increase the value of the painting and, the original painting had a light collar. So, it is indeed consistent in details and aligns with the standards of Rembrandt.

Secondly, since the original painting has a light coloured collar, it would reflect light that illuminates the face of the woman in painting which explains the absence of any shadow in the face of the woman in the painting thereby resolves the shadow related inconsistency raised in the reading passage.

Finally, the professor also mentions that, although the original painting is made on wood panel, many several wood pieces are added to the painting later to enlarge the painting in order to bring it a notion of grand and increase value. Additionally, the piece of wood in the this original painting and wood piece from another original self portrait painting of Rembrandt are found to be part of the same tree.This explanation reinforces that the original painting is inline with Rembrandt's methods of using wood pieces and resolves the doubt that was cast in the reading passage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dity of attributing the painting called, Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White ...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'intends'.
Suggestion: intends
...as added several years later by someone intending to increase the value of the painting a...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y shadow in the face of the woman in the painting thereby resolves the shadow rel...
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Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...lue. Additionally, the piece of wood in the this original painting and wood piece from a...
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Line 7, column 411, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...t are found to be part of the same tree.This explanation reinforces that the origina...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, regarding, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14234875445 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64858114464 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491103202847 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.9 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 21.2450331126 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.413816961 49.2860985944 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 206.428571429 110.228320801 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.1428571429 21.698381199 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57142857143 7.06452816374 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135111645152 0.272083759551 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739552839621 0.0996497079465 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344454533366 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891693279741 0.162205337803 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348108220234 0.0443174109184 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.8 13.3589403974 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 53.8541721854 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 11.0289183223 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.42 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.498013245 171% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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