policy in which people are in charge to pay fee
Both the reading and lecture are discussing a policy in which people are in charge to pay the admission fee to use national parks in the US. The author states that fees should be abolished in which everyone can enter the parks for free. However, the lecturer refutes the idea and believes that there are some advantages to this policy.
While the reading attributes that forcing people to pay the fee for camping in the park is against their right, and it leads to discouraging people from visiting them, the professor contrasts the argument by asserting that it actually encourages people to visit the not famous parks. In addition, the admission fee can be used for updating facilities or even paying employee salaries. If we eliminate the fee, the government makes up it by increasing the taxes and in that case, there will be more pressure on people.
The next point brought up is that asking the people to pay their fee is the time-consuming process. Long lines occur at the entrance of the park as well as a lot of complaints. Therefore, park staffs are not able to work elsewhere. Yet the lecturer believes by ruling this policy, they can use the money to improve services of the park and its safety.
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Both the reading and lecture are discuss...
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...re are some advantages to this policy. While the reading attributes that forcin...
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...here will be more pressure on people. The next point brought up is that asking...
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...e services of the park and its safety.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1009.0 1373.03311258 73% => OK
No of words: 213.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73708920188 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53025075473 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577464788732 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 419.366225166 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4595660933 49.2860985944 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.9 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36077218292 0.272083759551 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125421264231 0.0996497079465 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150322072642 0.0662205650399 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237519478724 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109004667105 0.0443174109184 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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