The reading and lecture about the possibilty of humans to travel to mars. The author claims. there are alot of problems make this traveling un succiesful. The lecturer casts doubt on claim made in article. She sayed traviling to mars is challenging, but we can solve these problems.
First of all, The author states, the trip take at least two years , so it's difficl to supply enough food, water and oxygen for astronauts,as comper to the trip to moon which take only few days. This point challenged by professor. She says, the astonauts can use hydrobonic techinge, in which they plant the hydrobonic in water instead of solid. These plants are used as food, and can recycle the water to puir evaporated water, then can collected and use it for drinking, also these plants take CO2 and release O2, so supply fresh air.
Second, the author mention,the astronauts stay in the space with zero gravity for along time lead to the muscles weakness and decrease vbone density. The lecturer debutted this urgument. She elaborates, the astronauts can do excersices to orevent muscles weakness, and take vitamins and calicume to strength their bones.
Finally, the writer states, astronauts on a mission exposed to harm radiation emited by sun, because they are far from rarth' magnetic field. In the other hand the lecturer posits, not all radiation is harmfull. In addition they can use especial equpiment reduce dengerous from radiation, furthermore, when spaceship in place with harm particales emitted from sun, they can use a ligh shield that protect whole spaceship.
The reading and lecture about the possibilty of humans to travel to mars. The author claims. there are alot of problems make this traveling un succiesful. The lecturer casts doubt on claim made in article. She sayed traviling to mars is challenging, but we can solve these problems.
First of all, The author states, the trip take at least two years , so it's difficl to supply enough food, water and oxygen for astronauts,as comper to the trip to moon which take only few days. This point challenged by professor. She says, the astonauts can use hydrobonic techinge, in which they plant the hydrobonic in water instead of solid. These plants are used as food, and can recycle the water to puir evaporated water, then can collected and use it for drinking, also these plants take CO2 and release O2, so supply fresh air.
Second, the author mention,the astronauts stay in the space with zero gravity for along time lead to the muscles weakness and decrease vbone density. The lecturer debutted this urgument. She elaborates, the astronauts can do excersices to orevent muscles weakness, and take vitamins and calicume to strength their bones.
Finally, the writer states, astronauts on a mission exposed to harm radiation emited by sun, because they are far from rarth' magnetic field. In the other hand the lecturer posits, not all radiation is harmfull. In addition they can use especial equpiment reduce dengerous from radiation, furthermore, when spaceship in place with harm particales emitted from sun, they can use a ligh shield that protect whole spaceship.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, then, at least, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1307.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 259.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04633204633 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56679698176 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637065637066 0.540411800872 118% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.5660704429 49.2860985944 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1333333333 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 4.19205298013 334% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295315857978 0.272083759551 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120074769547 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122298602503 0.0662205650399 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224108386064 0.162205337803 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.285228859293 0.0443174109184 644% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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