TOEFL T P O 11 Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading and the lecture discuss the phenomenon of fewer readers of literature. The author of the reading alleges that people read less literature is harmful to the society from multiple aspects. However, the professor in the listening material casts serious doubt on what the reading believes.

First of all, the reading passage mentions that if we don’t read literature anymore, we will lose the opportunity to get intellectual stimulation. On the other hand, the lecture states that people’s intellectual stimulation is not only relying on literature. We can also get inspired from non-literature books, such as history or science…etc, and those books were written as good as novels and poems. As a result, literature is not the only sources for intellectual development.

Secondly, the passage suggests that culture has been degraded since people reading less literature. That is to say, people spend more time on superficial content. Nevertheless, the lecturer disagrees with the idea. Even though we read less literature, we can still study on valuable material that isn’t written in books, such as music and movies. There are a lot of medias that can spread cultural value besides books.

Last but not least, the reading states that writers get fewer support from investors and publishers because they lack an audience. However, the lecturer from the listening claims that the problems are probably on the writers themselves than on the decreasing amount of readers. A lot of writers compose books that are too difficult to understand. If the books itself are not good, why would young generation spend their time on?

In conclusion, the speaker opposes the reading passage and states that fewer readers of literature is not totally negative. The reading culture is changing, so we should not see as the same angles on learning as we did in the past.

Votes
Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun readers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ure discuss the phenomenon of gradually less readers of literature. The author of th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this novel' or 'those novels'?
Suggestion: this novel; those novels
...tc. Those books were written as good as those novel and poems. As a result, people’s intell...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...spend more time on superficial content. Nevertheless, the lecturer disagrees wit...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 311.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27974276527 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75919469491 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540192926045 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7521007662 49.2860985944 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.55 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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