TOEFL TPO 16 Integrated Writing Task

The main idea of both the reading and the lecture is about the limitation of the archaeological studies of British artifacts. The passage mentions three reasons to support that the traces of British artifacts is difficult. The lecturer, on the other hand, categorically denies all three reasons and explains the new guideline enactment that has improved the problems of the passage.
First, the passage discusses that although the builders notice valuable sites while constructing, they do nothing to preserve them. The lecturer, on the contrary, denies the idea, citing that based on the new regulations, no construction can be embarked on except when a professional expert analyzes and evaluate s the site of construction in order to make sure that no sign of ancient artifact is detected. Accordingly, if they see any signs that proves to be ancient artifacts or sites, they will gather together so as to meticulously collect all artifacts before preceding the construction.
Second, while the reading claims that the amount of the fund received from government is too limited that only a few archaeological artifacts can be thoroughly investigated, the lecture denies this idea citing that according to the new policies, the construction agencies are in charge of paying the required fund to complete the research which in turn, helps the researchers to have a comprehensive investigation which wasn’t possible before.
Eventually, the reading believes that finding related job for archaeologists is an arduous task and it is restricted only to universities. However, the lecturer refuses this fact and highlights the notion based on the new rules, a plenty amount of job positions are needed so as to process the sites, preserve the artifacts and present this findings via articles and reports. Thus, more and more professional archaeologists are required in Britain compared to the past.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...aces of British artifacts is difficult. The lecturer, on the other hand, categorica...
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Line 2, column 516, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...cts or sites, they will gather together so as to meticulously collect all artifacts befo...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... received from government is too limited that only a few archaeological artifacts...
^^
Line 4, column 275, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...enty amount of job positions are needed so as to process the sites, preserve the artifac...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 338, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...tes, preserve the artifacts and present this findings via articles and reports. Thus...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, as to, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34666666667 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10230022188 2.5805825403 120% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553333333333 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.978687115 49.2860985944 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.4 110.228320801 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 21.698381199 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.9 7.06452816374 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212103428847 0.272083759551 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747508577848 0.0996497079465 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392205958458 0.0662205650399 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12027203056 0.162205337803 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349699414642 0.0443174109184 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.3589403974 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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