TOEFL TPO 51 - integrated writing
The reading claims that humans are being fascinated by elephants and asserts three examples to demonstrate that statement. However, the professor finds all the ideas dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all.
The author argues that when elephants become old and weak, they leave their herd and go somewhere to die alone. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that not all of the elephants are aware of this issue. She mentions that, when elephants become old and weak, their teeth lose the ability of chewing; so, they leave their herd to continue living near water due to soft vegetation of that area. Hence, the reason that why the passage argues that bones of elderly elephants are discovered near water, mentioned by the professor as the elderly elephants graze in that regions at the end of their life.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that elephants look to have artistic ability. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that when humans as trainer of elephants, touch their ear, the elephant remember to use brush stroke to draw something. She adds that, in fact, those lines that are drawn by elephants are not really line or even an animal and the elephant is not cognizant of that.
Finally, the reading asserts that elephants have a fear of mice. In contrast, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that elephants do not react to the mice. In fact, the reaction of elephants to the mice are due to the fact that they are catious of unfamiliar animals. The professor, in further, brings up the example of zoo, that in zoos when the elephant becomes aware of mice, it does not react to them and deos not mind them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 166, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...he lecturer brings up the idea that not all of the elephants are aware of this issue. She ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, really, so, in contrast, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77054794521 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37404364405 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506849315068 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0883639361 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.153846154 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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